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Having two children VS. Having More than two children in every family


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Sep 25, 2010, 03:52am   #
I would be so grateful if you do me a favor and correct my essay

Some people believe that families should not have more than two children. Others believe that they can have as many children as they wish. Which opinion do you support? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I subscribe to this view that people should avoid having more than two children since
insufficient natural resources, limited facilities and inadequate parents' time and energy to allocate each kid.

From one side, giving birth to more than two children in every family undoubtedly leads
deficiency in many natural resources. World's natural resources are not good enough for the giant population who their life is completely dependent on them. For instance, nowadays we are witnessing energy crisis in whole of the world; fossil fuels that almost every person uses for transport are running out. Likewise, renewing these valuable resources takes many times; thus, neglecting explosion population would become more likely a catastrophe in future.

Furthermore, before inviting new kids to this world, we should think about their required
facilities. If the infrastructure of cities does not grow at the same rate of rising population, the result will impose some strains on this innocent generation. Such as, lack of education facilities, health services and housing problems.

Ultimately, people should not have more than two children, as it costs them too much
effort and time; since, for nurturing proper children, parents should have adequate time and energy to give each child. For example, unfortunately in many populated families, parents abandon their children and do not care about their upbringing due to lack of ability and time to concentrate on their education. Most of crowded families are too lenient because parents could not track behavior of each child and focus on trend of his education.

To sum up, I stand behind supporters of having maximum two children. In this way, we
can save our world from energy crisis; in addition, we do not need cost a lot to fulfill requirements of that over population. In the end, it is crystal clear that parents have limited effort; hence, they cannot be successful in upbringing five or six children like one or two children. Having lower children more probably beneficial to both parents and kids.


thanks for your attention

Sep 25, 2010, 05:33am   #
Hi,
I think your essay has good points. However, I feel you can present it better. You better include examples for each of your reason. If these examples are on personal basis, then it is much better. Try again. You can have a good essay

I subscribe(I dont think this word is suitable) to this view that people should avoid having more than two children ......

I suggest;
I support the idea of having not more than two children in a family is the best.
There is a missing verb in this sentence:
Having lower children more probably beneficial to both parents and kids.
It would be better if you say:
Having lower children is probably more beneficial to both parents and kids.

Good Luck
The first sentence is missing some words:
I subscribe to this view that people should avoid having more than two children, since we have insufficient natural resources, limited facilities and inadequate parents' time and energy to allocate each kid.

From one side, giving birth to more than two children in every family undoubtedly leads
to deficiency in many natural resources.

The world's....

Some examples include lack of education facilities, health services and housing problems.
OR
You can use "such as" when it is part of a longer sentence, like this:
If the infrastructure of cities does not grow at the same rate of rising population, the result will impose some strains on this innocent generation, such as lack of education facilities, health services and housing problems.
Oct 2, 2010, 08:49am   #
Do you know this?

It has been found that child's great part of the mental development is completed during the early childhood. During this time parents affections and associations are very important for the child's mental development. Sometimes child does not get the required affection and care in a crowded family. For two children family each child gets the maximum attention.


Asoka



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