Hey..., it seems that you didn't pay particular attention to the previous comments. I suggest that you get back you the last essay and peruse all readers' comments.
When it comes to an introductory statement, your task is to introduce the background information retrieved from prompt, and then raise your claim. Also, it is a good idea if you could present a hook, which attracts the readers' attention. By doing this, I am sure that you will have a solid introductory paragraph.
Although you have written two informative bodies, you failed to build your strong arguments so as to answer what the prompt is asking. As a result, the contents of this essay are too weak to defend your arguments. As mentioned previously, I suggest that you'd better find some facts retrieved from some finding. Taking an example, you can extract the results from The Journal of Happiness & Well-Being.
each people have
each person has
common point
common/public perception