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Happy As a Dod. Best piece of advice that you can offer.


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Mar 7, 2012   #1
Hi !! i need help with this essay. Im not very good at this so i will need a lot of help with this.
The essay is about the best piece of advice that you can offer and explain why is important. It need to have the attention getter/hook, elaboration. bridge and thesis or concluding sentence. Its 450 words minimum.

I want to know if the first paragraph is well place or if the second paragraph should be the first one. please feel free to say any suggestions. Here it is:

While the human race is the most evolved, is probably the most unhappy race. I have never seen a dog cry because he is afraid that you might leave him, he simply worry about eating, playing, sleeping and he don't even think about the possibility that someone is going to abandon him, and he is very happy living that way. From there is where my question arises. Why people cannot be happy as a dog? To start with, we should appreciate what we have, and stop being worried and immersed in our problems, that most of it are absurd and meaningless, but instead, look out the window and see the big and fantastic city where we live; and stop being boring and depressed in our work and appreciate that even in crisis we are lucky enough to have a job and that we can get on with our life normally.

Many people think that life is something minor; most of these people do not appreciate what they have, and in some way are very ungrateful to the people around them and life itself. On the other hand, there are people who appreciate and love life in a very unique way and take advantage of good times, and from the bad times always bring out the positive side. The value that each person gives to life, often depends on the situation in which they are living because our minds just think as our eyes are constantly watching; in fact, if a person who is in a total poverty, who has no family and no health could not tell that is having a happy life, and the value that this person would give to this situation would be null; although, this situation would be different if that person has money, family, health and many amenities, that person would be grateful for life and always continues fighting without surrendering to improve even more.

In general, nowadays most people care very little about life, more specific at young people, and the evidence is the number of suicides that have occurred recently, although many do it for emotional or family issues, specifically when they don't value life and with the simple fact that they think that no one loves them, no one understands them and that life is meaningless for them, that's despise life completely. From this situation comes to my mind an old Arab proverb that says, "I complained because I had no shoes, until I saw someone who had no feet". We will always miss something, but surely we will always have more than others, and when we value what we have, we'll learn to not wonder so much about what we don't have, because as we lead our lives, our weaknesses never learn to be happy to the fullest, as we should be.


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