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'Guitar is my friend' - Essay on my hobby of playing guitar


hanksze 3 / 8  
Nov 20, 2012   #1
Here is my essay. 139 Words long, 820 Characters

Pluck the strings in order, thumb, index, ring, middle, and all over again. After the prelude, the rhythm follows, with a pick in hand, strum without restraints, just play out whatever tunes pop up in my mind. Guitar is my friend. When worn-out by the stress of life, frustration in school, or disagreement with family, it's always the best remedy. My hands are on it, my fingers shift naturally on different frets. In that very moment, listening to the harmony of six strings and humming the tunes in my mind, my mind sifted through all the complication of life. While playing, I can't help but smile uncontrollably and follow the rhythm. The happiness and music helps me regain my strength and reset myself back in order, forget all the negative emotion, and carry on plucking thumb, index, ring, middle.

I try to write it in a really sincere way, so I really need others' review to see if I have made it.
Just share your first thoughts and tell me your ideas, please be critique.
And do I have to make it longer to use up all the space, if yes, what things need further description?
Really appreciate your help!!
kevinll 3 / 5 1  
Dec 24, 2012   #2
A very good one, better put more words on your feelings and describe it more specifically.

You still get space!

Keep working!!
dnx2000 5 / 14 3  
Dec 24, 2012   #3
I really liked it, especially since I know exactly how you feel. I'd say keep "Guitar is my friend" or maybe change it to "The Guitar"

Also, you probably intended this, but as I was reading this I was slightly disorientated by the change of tense to past tense in "my mind sifted through all the complication of life"

(probably due to my poor reading skills) I would say "my mind sifts..."
OP hanksze 3 / 8  
Dec 25, 2012   #4
It seems like you play guitar as well, cool!!

Glad I can have comments from other guitar player.

Thanks a lot for you reminding!!


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