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IELTS: Greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 25, 2014   #1
The diagram illustrates how greenhouse gases trap energy from the sun. Greenhouse give affect to atmosphere and earth.

Generally, heating of the earth shows process heat trapped by greenhouse gases. This trapped reflect to atmosphere and partly radiated into space.

Extra CO2 from burning fossil fuel so that heating trapped by greenhouse gases affect heating earth. This.This heating can not absorbed by O2 because felling of trees. Effect of heating in the earth, heat energy radiated into space. This heating partly reflected off atmosphere

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Overall, the greenhouse gases big affect to earth. Atmosphere become thin and heating of earth.



BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 26, 2014   #2
This.This heating can notabsorbed by O2 because felling of trees.

write more, upinipin..:)
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 26, 2014   #3
This.This heating can not absorbed by O2 because felling of trees. Effect of heating in the earth, heat energy radiated into space.

you should be careful toward your words :)
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 28, 2014   #4
Hello ipinupin,

As mr. eddie said about the sake of this writing

The aim of this task is to examine your English skills describing the main objectives of the data regarding the visual writing.

so, you have to give the information based on the prompt. As long as i read your writing you did not present the clear information. Moreover, if you have overview you can omit the conclusion, but you should divide your body paragraph to be two parts.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 28, 2014   #5
hello,,how many words you've written here? in IELTS TASK 1 you need to write at least 150 words

this report seems like less than 150 words
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 28, 2014   #6
This trapped reflectS

give affect

double verbs
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 28, 2014   #7
Overall, the greenhouse gases big affect to earth. Atmosphere becomes thin and heating of earth.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 30, 2014   #8
Greenhouse give affectsto atmosphere and earth negatively.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
May 1, 2014   #9
Greenhouse give affects to atmosphere and earth.
Your detailed body paras are not adequately informing the details of what the diagram presents. They need to contain more details. Follow dumi's approach for the structure of this task.

Overall, the greenhouse gases big affect to earth. Atmosphere become thin and heating of earth.

... this has grammar errors.
Overall, the greenhouse gases affect the earth negatively. They make the atmosphere thinner and heat up the earth severely.


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