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'no government restrictions'; Creative Artists vs Freedom of Expression


VY NGUYEN 1 / -  
Sep 9, 2010   #1
In my opinion, I mention two issues in this topic.

The first, I want to mention about freedom or not in creative artists. I think, almost fields need freedom for creation. Nowadays, we have been lived in the comfortable life because of having creation. So, freedom to creations is essential factor in the arts. Should be given the freedom to express their own ideas in wherever way their wish whereby we have many immortal creations such as: titanic, saclor, yellow fall of Leona de vanhci,... Have creation, have new artist. In different period, we have different emotion in arts feeling. Old something need to change in order to serve these emotion. So freedom in creative artist is very important in creating many kind of arts in a day. Artists is more and more go up new level due to freedom to express their ideas in wherever way their wish.

The second, I mention about should or shouldn't have government restriction on what they do. In my opinion, have government restrictions is necessary . Because no government restrictions on what their do maybe cause to disorder in many fields: society, economic, politics...By means of appearing many bestial and reactive books, pictures, films. They have bad significant influences to children, to conceiving person about many things. Maybe cause deviant life for many people to make society not develop. So, I don't agree with no government restrictions on what they do.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Sep 11, 2010   #2
In my opinion, it is important to mention two issues when discussing whether artists should be given creative freedom. First, I want to mention about freedom or not in for not only creative artists but also people who are not artists. I think almost all fields need freedom for creation.

Nowadays, we have been living with comfortable lifestyles because of having creative innovation.

In different period, we have different emotion in arts feeling. Old something need to change in order to serve these emotion. This part makes no sense, and I don't know how to fix it. Sorry! :-)

Because government restrictions may cause disorder in many fields...

You have some good ideas, but your English is still at the level where you need to practice reading aloud and practice typing correct sentences while slowly speaking them. Only with practice can you reprogram your mind with the correct forms of verbs, nouns, adjectives, and so on.
anhduy_tran 2 / 3  
Sep 24, 2010   #3
Personally, I think you should reform your essay to be more academic. Your introductory paragraph had better introduce about "art" and include "thesis statement".

Moreover you can improve your writing by reading reference books. It's really useful.
Good luck!


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