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Government impose heavy tax on air traffic to reduce noise pollution


AlexenderGG 1 / -  
May 6, 2014   #1
Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily.

Do you agree or disagree?


One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the blooming of the aviation industry. It is undeniably true that tremendous increased in the flight industry had contributed to incline of noise pollution and more airport needed to be built but the opinion of government should halt the air traffic by imposing a heavier tax is strongly disagreed. Analyzing the fact that air transport offers a convenient and safer way of transportation and increase in air traffic will boost a country's tourism will prove this.

Firstly, travelling by airplane is one of the safest mean of transportation. For instance, one can read about car collisions in the newspaper daily but rarely heard news about airplane accidents. Thus it is statistically shown air transportation is safe. Hence, it is obvious that the government should not reduce air traffic.

Secondly, massive increase in air transportation had greatly increased the influx of tourist in a country because air tickets are made economical, as a result it is affordable to many. Furthermore, not only it expands a country's tourism but also boost the country's economy. On the contrary, heavier tax will cause overpriced tickets as well as dramatic decrease tourist. Therefore, it is evident that government should not introduce a heavier tax.

In conclusion, aviation industry had offered more secure way of travel and it encourages more tourist to a country. So it is firmly disagree that government should reduce air transport by enforcing heavier tax. In contrast, government should do more research in advancing the aviation sector.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
May 6, 2014   #2
It is undeniably true that tremendous increased in the flight industry had contributed to incline of noise pollution and more airport needed to be built but the opinion of government should halt the air traffic by imposing a heavier tax is strongly disagreed

don't make the readers confuse when they read this sentence, it seems too long, I suggest to separate it become two sentences to make it more clearly, so it will be easier to understand

Do you agree or disagree?

this is agree disagree question, here you should mention other people opinion whether your opinion is agree or disagree
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 7, 2014   #3
First, I have a small admin request. You should open all IELTS related threads in the Writing Feedback forum which is the most appropriate forum for IELTS essays. This has been transferred from Grammar Usage to Writing Feedback :)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 19, 2014   #4
One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the blooming of the aviation industry. It is undeniably true that tremendous increasedvolume enhancements occurred in the flightairline industry , which had contributed to incline of noise pollution and more airport needed to be built but the opinion of government should halt the air traffic by imposing a heavier tax is strongly disagreed .

The last sentence is way too long :( Also, be careful with using synonyms. You should use them only if you are confident with their meanings.


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