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Nov 15, 2009, 06:35pm   #
Hi, I am preparing for the toefl ibt and need help for the writing section.
Please give your feedback so as to get good score.
Thanks.

"Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation. Use specific reasons to support your details".

Government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, but in my opinion improved transportation services would be advantageous to general public. Good transportation would provide better living condition, income to the government and more job options in the country.

First of all, improvement in transportation would lead to improved living condition in the country. Cars and other motor bikes make use of fuel energies like gas, diesel etc. This causes emission of carbon mono oxide in the atmosphere and results in air pollution. This would affect general health of the public. Furthermore, more traffic causes more traffic jam and noise pollution and more accidents. Improved transportation would encourage more people to make use of it, and thus reduces the risk of accidents and provide an healthy environment to live.

Second, transportation would increase income for the government. By improving roads government would spend money on it, and does not get anything in return. However, by increasing number of buses, trains and other services would allow government to raise its income by collecting fares. This income could be better utilized by the government in other development methods.

Third ,better transportation services leads to increase in job opportunities. Increased transportation services would provide services such as drivers, managers, maintenance jobs and so on. This would causes employment option for people in different areas. Thus more career option for general public. Therefore a general up liftment in the society.

All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing healthier environment, improve funds for the government as well as create more job option to the public.
Nov 15, 2009, 09:57pm   #
Government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates and make convenient for the travelling with personal vehicle , but in my opinion improved transportation services would be advantageous to general public. Good public transportation would provide better living condition save the environment, increase the income of the government and create more job options in the country.

First of all, improvement in transportation would lead to improved living condition [font#FF0000] help to provtect the environment[/font] in the country. Cars and other motor bikes make use of fuel energies like gas, diesel etc. This causes excessive emission of carbon mono oxide in the atmosphere and results in air pollution which was the main reason of the warmroom effect. This would affect general health of the public. Furthermore, more traffic causes also contribute to traffic jam, noise pollution and accidents. Improved transportation would encourage attract more people to make use of it, in publice transportatoion, thus reduces the the risk of accidents and provide an healthy environment to live.save the energy thus reduce the emission of the greenhouse gases.
Second, transportation would increase income for the government. although improving the pubulic transport condition such as increasing number of buses, trains and other services roads government would spend lots of money, and it is very likey such investment does not get good return.[/s] However, by would allow government to raise its income [s]by collecting fares through[/s] good management government sitll can earn the money form the investment,for example, the subway systerm in Hong Kong is one of the few profitable systerm , and is a good example for good opertation . world the income could be better utilized by the government in other development methods.
Third ,better transportation services leads to increase in job opportunities. Increased transportation services would directly provide services job positons as drivers, managers, maintenance and so on. moreover the investment will stimulate the related industy, such as vehicular manufacturer.This would causes employment option for people in different areas. Thus more career option for general public. Therefore a general up liftment in the society.

All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing healthier environment, improve funds for the government as well as create more job option to the public.
Nov 15, 2009, 11:37pm   #
Government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, in my opinion, government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. but in my opinion improved transportation services Improving transportation services would be advantageous not only for the general public, but also it Good transportation would provide better enviroment quality living condition, boost the government income and generate more jobs options in the country.



First of all, improving improvement in transportation would enhance the quality of the country enviroment lead to improved living condition in the country. Cars and other motor vehicules bikes make use of fuel energies like gas, diesel etc. This generate causes emission of carbon monoxide mono oxide in the atmosphere and results in air pollution, affecting . This would affect genera people's health of the public. Furthermore, more traffic causes more traffic jam and noise pollution and more accidents. Improved transportation would encourage more people to make use of it, and thus reduces the risk of accidents and provide an healthy environment to live.

Second, transportation would increase income for the government. In contrast of By improving roads, transportation would increase income for the government. By improving roads the government would spend money on it, and does not without getting anything in return. However, by increasing number of buses, trains and other transportation services, it would allow the government to increase raise its income by collecting fares. This income could be better utilized by the government in other development methods.

Third ,better transportation services leads to increase in job opportunities. Increased transportation services would provide services generate jobs such as drivers, managers, maintenance jobs and so on. This would causes employment options for people in different areas. Thus more career option for general public. Therefore a general up liftment in the society.

All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing healthier environment, improving e funds for the government as well as creatinge more job offers ption to the public.
Nov 16, 2009, 12:20pm   #
Thanks rmli,
Thanks margarita,
for your help. This would be really very helpful for me.
Please moderator have a look on this essay.
From the great, great work that margarita and rmli did, I can see that you have to work on a few minor things, like...

If you start a sentence with "Although," you do not need to use "but."
Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, but in my...

Also, rmli changed your ending to say "job offers," but you could also use the word "option" like you originally wanted to. You can write: All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing a healthier environment, improving funds for the government, and as well as create creating more job options for the public.

Above, I showed you the same thing the others showed: when you list several things, keep the verb forms consistent. In tis case, each item ends in ing. I hope that helps you to improve your skill!!



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