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A Good Friend; trustworthy and loyal person


vascograca 1 / -  
Nov 8, 2013   #1
Could you please give me feedback on this essay and correct the grammar? It is for a school work! Thanks :D

A Good Friend

There are many different characteristics a good friend needs to have. A good friend needs to be a trustworthy and loyal person. He needs to be fair, caring, and loving. A good friend would be someone that can make you smile or laugh; a person that will make you happy when you are sad. However he needs to be honest. He needs to be a person that is able to tell you the truth even if it isn't pleasant to hear. He needs to be able to tell you something that you might not want to hear. But a good friend needs to be someone that won't try to change the way a person is. He needs to be able to accept different personalities and characteristics. People might say that a life without a friend is no life at all.

A good friend needs to be a person whom you can trust. He needs to be someone you can tell secrets to and trust that they will keep them under any circumstances. They need to be loyal; someone who will always stick by your side in times of need and won't sell you out for anything; someone who will be there for the good times but also the bad times. They will make good times better and bad times easier to bear. It is very hard to gain trust; however, it is easy to lose it.

A friend needs to be a fair person. He also needs to be caring and loving. They need to be good listeners and positive people. Without these characteristics, you won't feel that you have a good friendship. A friend should be someone that can comfort you when you are in need of a shoulder. A good friend needs to be honest with you. He needs to tell you things about you that you should improve. Not because he is picking on you, but because he cares about you. He should try to make you a better person but not change you. As a matter of fact, he shouldn't change anyone. He should be someone who can accept different types of people as friends with good and not so good characteristics.

It is easy to determine if you are a good friend or not. If you are able to tell your friend things he should try to work on you are clearly helping him, making yourself a better person and a better friend. If you can accept the way other people are and befriend them, then you are a true friend. Also, when you have the capability to listen to his problems and be a positive influence. It might be hard to stay positive after hearing all of the issues your friend has in his life, but if you are able to do it, than you are a friend worth keeping.

A good friend is many things. He is loyal, trustworthy, comforting, loving, caring, honest, fair, positive, and happy. He should stay by your side no matter what happens and someone you would trust with your life. That is who a good friend is. If you do by any chance have a great friend, you should try to keep him for as long as you live, because good friends are hard to find.
phuongnam95 9 / 28  
Nov 8, 2013   #2
This essay is good but personally, I think that you should provide some examples from your own experience to support more.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 8, 2013   #3
There are many different characteristics a good friend needs to have.

A good friend needs to possess several characteristics.

A good friend needs to be a trustworthy and loyal person. He needs to be fair, caring, and loving.

He or she should be a trustworthy and loyal person who should be fair, caring and loving too.

A good friend would be someone that can make you smile or laugh; a person that will make you happy when you are sad.

Basically you are telling that a good friend should be able to keep your spirits high in both happy and sad situations.
I think you give too many characteristics of a good friend in the introduction. I like if you restricted them to about four and discuss each characteristic in each body paragraph.
sofianc 1 / 2  
Nov 11, 2013   #4
The essay is very acceptable, but I think that you should have included examples of your own experiences in this area. Also, you should add moments or actions where real friendship is proved, you only wrote about characteristics and cualities a good friend has to have. You can also improve the way you express using rich vocabulary and not repeating the same words in the paragraphs, some words are repeated too many times, use synonyms.


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