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Here is my the new version of my essay, please help to comments. By the way, I don't know why but trying to write short and compact seem to be a difficult task for me :(
There is no doubt that globalization is an issue which frequently generated a great deal of heated debate, with opponents claim that the identity of countries' cultures would definitely lost as a result of globalization, whilst supporters remaining that this is not true. I tend to disagree with this statement.
Obviously, globalization is an inevitable trend and brings with it plenty of economic as well as socio-cultural benefits. As a consequence, people from different societies seem to becoming alike. For example, we often eat the same food, watch the same TV shows, listen to the same types of music and wear the same clothes. Beside, it is not difficult to find many cities in Western countries are decorated during Lunar New Year or Asian people are celebrating on Halloween or Thanksgiving days. However, if we consider these phenomena as cultural identity loss, I would argue that it is just a very narrow definition of culture and that there are always differences between cultures.
In my opinion, the foundation of culture identity is based on shared values, in the other words, is the way people evaluate the same matter. For instance, in Eastern countries, it is very common for adults people stay with their parents even when they are married. Being responsible to their family, taking care of their parents when they are turning old are important values in Eastern societies. In contrast, being independent and taking care of oneself are more valued in Western societies. To do this, many parents in Western countries encourage their children at the age of 18 to move out; even their own children are not yet willing to do it. Another obvious example is, no matter how well the world is globalized, Asian people still prefer using chopstick and bowls to knives and forks.
In conclusion, my point of view is the existence of cultural identity does not relate to globalization. The differences between cultures are permanent and the pros of globalization far outweigh the cons.