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Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferred by people


mansten 1 / 1  
Aug 7, 2009   #1
Tough some people prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night,i always prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work because you can feel better during day and can leave time in other to other things.

Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferd by people because of starting with good senses and behaviours in day are important to make a good day.Many resercher invent that people work more protactive in the morning than get up late because their sense and behaviour is more healthy in the morning.due to the fact that the circulation of the blood accelerated,the body of humans creat more protactive behaviours in the morning so that people can continually focus on their day's work.İn addition to those people invent more idea in the morning becasue of being active.For instance some resercher invented that students are more pay attention their lesson in the morning so that they learn much more things and they are succesfull.İn the other hand getting up later bring about be stressfull therefore day's work cannot be paid attention.

Some people complain that they cannot leave time in other to their social activities.Firstly the main day's works which provide to continue people's life for example going to work,shoping,clearing home,preparing exams and the others should be got through in the morning.Afterwards social activity can be made in the remainder day.Getting up early in the morning provite to gain time so that day's work can be made comfortablly.İn addition to gaining time people always star in front og life.

İn conslusion getting up early in the morning provide to gain time so that we can get through all our day's work.İf we are more succesful in our life,getting up early should be efforted and never surrendered.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Aug 7, 2009   #2
Th ough some people prefer to get up later in the day and work until late at night, I always prefer to get up early in the morning and start the day's work because you can feel better during the day and can leave time in other to do other things.

This sentence is awkwardly long. Also, one sentence doesn't make a paragraph.

I wonder for what purpose you have written this essay? A proficiency test? A class assignment? Either way, you probably want to state all of your arguments in your introduction if not in your thesis statement itself. Certainly, you must proofread more carefully to avoid errors such as using "creat" for "create."
OP mansten 1 / 1  
Aug 7, 2009   #3
This is a toefl topic.Due to İ want to prepare myself toefl exam,İ write this topic.What do you think about my writing its important for me.when you have advice for me please say

thank you
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Aug 7, 2009   #4
You need to attend to basics. For example, you must place a space after punctuation marks, as I have done in these sentences. Otherwise, you make an error every time you use a punctuation mark and also make the essay very difficult to read. Also attend more closely to spelling, checking to make sure you have not omitted any letters. Finally, I notice that you are trying to write relatively complex sentences for someone who is still learning the language. While your thoughts about a topic may be complex, try to break those thoughts down into very basic sentences in order to avoid making grammatical errors.


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