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Friends and family have a lot of topics to talk together and sharing their opinion when watching TV


pppanta 3 / 9 1  
Oct 18, 2013   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Watching television is the most thing that people do when they have free time. There are both advantages and disadvantages on watching television. Some people said that television has destroyed communication among family and friends. However, I disagree with the statement. There are several reasons to support my point of view which are watching television makes people have more and new topics to talk, family and friends can exchange their opinion and they can spend time together.

First of all, television is one of the ways that people can gain more knowledge and experience. Therefore, they will have lots of stories from things that they have watched naming movies, news and television shows which they would like to tell to other people. For instance, friends always talked about movies or soap opera that they watched last night.

In addition, not only more topics people receive but they also can share their opinion to family or friends. There are many television programs or even news that people can make disputation about. For example, a group of friends are sharing their view to one another about headline news. Moreover, this thing make people accepted other's opinion much more.

Finally, watching television is one of the activities that all members in family or groups of friends can do together. Actually, it makes people gathering in the one place such as living room. Thereby, they can communicate while watching. For instance, parents can teach their children about things on television programs. Another example is friends can have more idea to do activities after watching some programs on television.

To conclude, television becomes an important thing in our lives nowadays which have several benefits. It makes people spend time with family or friends and make them have a lot of topics to talk together with sharing their opinion.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Oct 19, 2013   #2
Watching television is the most thing that people do when they have free time

Watching television is the most common thing that people do during their leisure time.

Some people saidsay that television has destroyed communication among family and friends.

... you should keep general statements like these in present tense because they keep happening.

There are several reasons to support my point of view which are watching television makes people have more and new topics to talk, family and friends can exchange their opinion and they can spend time together

... This sentence is really not necessary since you are going to defend your opinion in the body paragraphs by giving reasons and supporting them with examples. Conclude your introduction with expressing your view clearly.

Please include a meaningful topic in the subject field in your future posts.
OP pppanta 3 / 9 1  
Oct 19, 2013   #3
Thank you so much for your advice Dumi. It is very useful for me.
soheylvahabzade 2 / 4  
Oct 19, 2013   #4
hi
not absolutely
in my opinion it depends on the program maybe a perfect tv program can make a good relationship beetwin family members
thanks
OP pppanta 3 / 9 1  
Oct 19, 2013   #5
Thank you soheylvahabzade.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 20, 2013   #6
First of all, television is one of the ways that people can gain more knowledge and experience.

.... Very good point.

Therefore, they will have lots of stories from things that they have watched naming movies, news and television shows which they would like to tell to other people.

But, how you connect this idea to your previous statement? Rather, it is not done convincingly :(
First tell the importance of this and how people gain knowledge and experience.
To conclude, television becomes an important thing in our lives nowadays which have severaloffers many benefits to our lives.
susananley 1 / 1 1  
Oct 20, 2013   #7
'Finally, watching television is one of the activities that all members in family or groups of friends can do together.'
I think many people usually this adverb, so you can change 'Finally' to 'Last but not least'. And because you repeat 'can' so you can replace it with 'could'.
OP pppanta 3 / 9 1  
Oct 20, 2013   #8
hi Pahan and Susananley
Thank you for your comment :D
legend777 5 / 14 2  
Oct 20, 2013   #9
Watching television is the most thing that people do when they have free time.
Is that proper to start a sentence with -ing form of a verb?
OP pppanta 3 / 9 1  
Oct 21, 2013   #10
Hi Legend777
Do you have any idea to edit it ? Thanks
legend777 5 / 14 2  
Nov 10, 2013   #11
sorry I made a mistake, your sentence isn't wrong.


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