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"Freedom to Failure" - Definition & Example paper, passive voice, prepostion use


kjwerner 1 / -  
Feb 24, 2010   #1
Freedom to Failure

Cell phone use today is completely out of control. We are hooked on a devise that most claim to be a necessity to survive in the world. Yes, the cell phone is a significant invention that allowed us to talk anytime, anywhere, to almost anyone. We want more. We crave the next new idea that will allow us to reach yet another level, and we do it at any cost. The freedom we have to communicate with our cell phones has been twisted, "to alter the mental, moral or emotional character of". (free dictionary) Lives continue to be lost by distracted cell phone users. Personal contact will become obsolete even though we have more ways to communicate than ever before. Phone edict and common courtesy are tossed in the gutter like they had no relevance in today's social development. The days of playing kick the can in the street with the neighborhood kids are over. Kids sit quietly alone with their phones. Our neighborhood streets have become a blur of useless activity that we merely have to walk through.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 25, 2010   #2
allowed us to talk anytime, anywhere, to almost anyone. We want more. We crave the next new idea that will allow us to reach yet another level

Yes, isn't it interesting that we crave that sense of connectedness, so we blog and twitter about what we do, and we always try to stay connected with everything. The thing that seems most fantastic to us is fame, which is like being connected with everyone. This observation about human nature should make us take another look at the spiritual traditions that emphasize meditation that leads to an awareness of our connectedness with everything.

Oneness seems to be what it is all about!

:-)

devise device
(devise is a verb that means something else)

Passive voice:
Phone edict and common courtesy are tossed in the gutter like they had no relevance in today's social development.
Active voice:
We toss common courtesy in the gutter like it has no relevance in today's social development processes.

Preposition use:
Our neighborhood streets have become a blur of useless activity through which we merely have to walk. ----- I don't think this sentence should be about having to walk through it. What are you really trying to say here?

:-)


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