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food from restaurants or from home - it doesn't matter; food just must have good nutrition


BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Mar 26, 2014   #1
Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As we know, many food stands or restaurants in our country. It is because habitually of society that likes fast food. They do not want to busy. But, other people prefer to prefer and eat food at home. In the following paragraphs I will give reasons about my statement.

To begin with fresher, when people eat food at home. It is better than people eat at food stands or restaurants. For example, when I am eating at home, ingredient of food always fresher because I know about that. From the other sides, sometimes I want to cook foods together at my home. Cooking together is enjoyable for me. Moreover, when I am cooking with my sister, for example. So, I can do everything I want at this moment.

Additionally, eating at home is a great way to save my money. I should not to pay about tax when I am eating at home. Different when people want to eat at restaurant.

Nevertheless, occasionally I want to eat at food stands or restaurants. It is because I like to attempt new foods. In our country, has many kinds of food. So, I think, I must try about the taste. Because of foods in my country have delicious taste. Besides, when I have party with my friends, sometimes we are eating together at restaurant.

To sum up, I think not matter when we want to eat at other places. Most important is the foods must have good nutrition. So that, we can care for health.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Mar 27, 2014   #2
But, other people prefer to prefer and eat food at home.

....I think you need to add main sentence
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Mar 27, 2014   #3
As we know, many food stands or restaurants in our country. It is because habitually of society that likes fast food. They do not want to busy. ButHowever , other people prefer to preferserve/prepare and eat food at home. In the following paragraphs, I will give reasons about my statement.

To begin with fresher, when people eat food at home. It is better than people eat at food stands or restaurants.

Some people realise that prepare food at home it will be better than eat at the restaurants.

Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

your prompt
As long as i read your prompt. there is talking about people who prefer to eat at home and others prefer to eat at restaurant, but in your essay you too much mention about yourself. I think that you have to explain more examples about people's habits which relate with your case.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Mar 27, 2014   #4
As we know, many food stands or restaurants in our country.

What does this mean? :( It is quite incomplete :(
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Mar 27, 2014   #5
Sister Ira, I think that you repeat the words that it is same in the one paragraph.

food

I mean you can change with other synonyms.
ernhy 17 / 28  
Mar 27, 2014   #6
But, other people prefer to prefer and eat food at home.

I think that you should not spend the words that is same. I mean you should change your word because I don't understand what do you mean. thanks :)


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