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First of all, a healthy mental and body is prerequisite to succeed - TOEFL


kevinhsin1124 11 / 10  
Jun 13, 2010   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their student's sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

I love playing basketball. I am a basketball player when I study in university. Even I graduated from the university; I often play basketball with my friends when I am free. For my opinion, I think sport activities have many advantages to students.

First of all, a healthy mental and body is prerequisite to succeed. Some of achieved people have no time to do exercises. They often feel tired and unhappy, even they are rich. Sport can helps us to build a strong body. University is not only helps students to learn knowledge, but also provide a surrounding to develop a sport custom. Have a sport custom can helps us to keep heath.

Secondly, students can learn many things by sport games. Like cooperation, honor and competition. For example, students can learn team work and competition by a basketball game, because basketball game is not a personal game. If a basketball team wants to win a game, the team work plays an important; role not a scorer. We all know knowledge is very important, but team work is important too. Team work helps people to solve many problems, if a man has a high level in his field, but if he does not know how to work with others then he will not succeed.

Thirdly, through to hold some sport games can helps universities to promote their reputation. A good school team can makes students to prude of their university. Furthermore, students can exchange different school cultures and experiences by the game contest. That will expands student's view and makes friends with others.

In conclusion, of course libraries are very important to universities, but university is not only a place that we learn the knowledge. Above that, I strongly agree with this statement.
begdjul - / 1  
Jun 13, 2010   #2
I was a basketball player when I studied in university.

Even when I have graduatedfrom university.

Have a sport custom can helps us to keep health (proof-read).
babyevy 3 / 27  
Jun 14, 2010   #3
You can improve your thesis by giving some controlling ideas or the reasons to support tour opinion and try to answer the question of the prompt...Universities should give the same amount of money to their student's sports activities as they give to their university libraries.

For In my opinion, I think sport activities have many advantages to students because ...

and another thing is that in your introduction you can mention one or some positive things obout investing in University libraries. (that is to be more partial)

Here are some mistakes that I found, and most of them are grammar, so I recommend you to reinforce your grammar, that will help you a lot, I think.... : )

University is not only helps students to learn gain knowledge, (no comma) but also provides a surrounding to develop a sport custom. Have a sport custom can helps us to keep heath healthy.

Thirdly, through to hold some sport games can helps universities to promote their reputation. A good school team can makes students to prude of their university. Furthermore, students can exchange different school cultures and experiences by the game contest. That will expands student's view and makes friends with others.

; ) after modals or auxiliaries tha verb shoul be in basic form !
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jun 14, 2010   #4
Hi Kevin, I see some great corrections in this thread, but I want to encourage you to rewrite the first paragraph. Change the first paragraph so that instead of talking about the value of sports you talk about the IMPORTANCE OF INVESTING PLENTY OF MONEY IN SPORTS PROGRAMS.

Know what I mean? You are on the right track, but you should mention three things in the first paragraph:
libraries
sports programs
money

You must make a statement in that first paragraph about the importance of giving as much money to sports as to the library.

P.S. You can say that the library is becoming obsolete, anyway, because of the Internet!! :-)
OP kevinhsin1124 11 / 10  
Jun 15, 2010   #5
thx everyone!! I am very appreciate that.

i have a TOEFL test on 6/26, i will try my best!!!
EF Kevin, thank you!! i will remember it!!


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