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'felicitousness' Happiness is considered very important in life.


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Feb 17, 2012, 05:01pm   #1
In general meaning,happiness is very important aspect of our life.Some people hold the idea that happiness does not exist in the world.While others contend that it may be defined in tough times.In this essay,I will try to point out my reasons why I strongly support the idea that the happiness is the most vital thing in our life.
To begin with,it is an obvious fact that every person understands the word "happiness" in her or his own way.To be more precise,seeing the world is happiness for a blind person or achieving a goal is happiness for every person.
In addition,everything that we have is happiness.Because,when we lose our ability,it seems to us like we lose our happiness.But we cannot feel it sometimes.A good example can light my point:My neighbour had considered himself as unhappy person.But after his wife passed away,he realized that his happiness was his family.My example follows that sometimes happiness cannot be felt.
I personally think that there are so many factors that show the real happiness(felicitousness) to us.That is to say,if one is talented,he or she will find his or her happiness by talent.Noone can create the formula of happiness.Because some people need ability in order to achieve happiness.On the contrary,some of them need health to feel the happiness truly.
To conclude,there are so many factors that cause to achieve happiness.It depends on person whether he or she will pursuit the happiness or not.




Please,correct my essay,if there are mistakes.
I respect the comment of everybody.
Thanks in advance.

Sincerely,
L.... Uzakova

To begin with,it is an obvious fact that every person understands the word "happiness" in her or his own way.To be more precise,seeing the world is happiness for a blind person or achieving a goal is happiness for every person. - GIVE SOME MORE EXPLANATION WHAT HAPPINESS MEANS
To conclude,there are so many factors that cause to achieve happiness - CAUSE HAPPINESS (without TO ACHIEVE)
AND THE CONCLUSION IS SHORT AND NOT CLEAR
Mar 6, 2012, 04:28pm   #3
In general meaning,happiness ---Always leave a space after each comma, period, or any other punctuation mark.

Some people hold the idea that happiness does not exist in the world, while others contend that it may be defined in tough times.

Because,when we lose our ability,---ability to do what?---it seems to us like we lose our happiness.


To conclude,there are so many factors that cause us to achieve happiness.

:)
I agree with the two other comments. You need to be a little more specific with the definition/examples and the conclusion definitely needs some work.


I strongly support the idea that the happiness... not sure if that was a mistake,
It depends on person whether he or she... Small error
The final sentance might need a comma to improve fluency.


This is my first activity with this account.



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