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Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea women are solely responsible for decding wether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that thay are also responsible for the children up."
Fatherhood also be important as much motherhood important in childrean life . The bothe parents effect deractly the education ande the life style of ther chalidrean. this thoughat should be explain in so many ways and with the examples.
when we take a look in around of us we can obsever that the chalidrean is a miner of ther pareants . All chalidrean represent there pareant whith there behaver and ther life style . if chalidren caree the both motherhood and fatherhood with deep impact or intrest in ther education and life style so thay cane be a example of the shine chaldren hows the career is so bright .
Chalidren also took pareants as a rool modle of ther life , boys wish that he will got the giral friend or life patener like his mother or other hand girals alo want the person of his life like his father so that if any on piral in note sport the chaldren the bahaver of chaldrean totly be change thay could be going be rong way .
The bring chalidrean is also be need so attion of ther parients in a past when wo mane is not goin for job the total responsbilty of the chalid on he but now there modren life woman going for job so she has not inafh time for chalidren then sha need the help of his basbend wo give the help when she is tired and not feel well . the single woman and man face may dificultry when then have the chalid thay chlould not took all rasponsbilty after thay give full intantion some important thing should be remain which effect a great impact or there chalidren .

I am total agree with this daffination that mother and father both is important for chalid.

You have many spelling and grammatical errors. Please go over the text once again and use a spell checker. You seem to be very weak in this area. Seek professional help from your teacher or someone who can give advice on this.
Plus, structure of essay is important. Separate paragraphs and differentiate the issues.

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Jan 15, 2012, 07:32am   #
Yes i agree with anonymous, you need to read through your work again and try and correct some spelling mistakes and grammar. Here is my correction of your written piece(spelling errors have been highlighted in red):

Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solemly responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies lead on to the idea that thay are also responsible for the children.
Fatherhood is also as important as motherhood to thier children . Both the parents effect the education and the lifestyle of ther children. This thought can be explained with many reasons and examples.
When we take a look around us we can obseve that children are a minor to their parents . All children represent thier parents whith thier behaviour and ther lifestyle . If children care for both the mother and father with deep impact or intrest in ther education and life style so thay can be an example children that shine in thier careers or schoolwork. Children also take thier parents as a role model to help them in thier life, boys hope for a girlfriend or a life partner like his mother on the other hand girls also want the person of her life like her father.
To bring up children they also need the attention of thier parents, like for example in the past when women were not working the child was mostly her responsibility. Whereas now in our modern society women work so this means the children might not get enough attention from thier parents. If the children feel that they do not get enough attention from thier parents, this might lead to an unsuccessful future for them.

I completely agree with this reason, both parents are important in thier childs education and future career.



I hope this helped a lot, have a look at the mistakes and the corrections that i have made and compare them. :)



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