Is this supposed to be a five paragraph essay, or a 4? For a standard, five paragraph essay, this is the simplified structure:
Paragraph one: Hooker, Thesis, 3 points. (For example, EF_Sean's "My father has taught me to be _____, ______, and _____,")
Paragraph two: Explain the first topic in your three points.
Paragraph three: Transition, then explain the second topic of your three points.
Paragraph Four: Transition, then explain the third topic of your three points.
Paragraph Five: Restate your thesis, summarize your three points, and reach a conclusion.
If you can do that, you will definitely get more than an E. Good luck!