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Fast food is cheap and convenient therefore has positive impact on human eating habits


iamchop 6 / 11  
Jul 17, 2014   #1
Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some people think this is negative trend while other do not.
What is your opinion?

Fast food has brought significant changes in the way we consume food in recent years. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of this kind of food has been positive or negative. While there are certainly some valid arguments to the contrary, i personally believe that the benefits of fast food far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold.

First of all, it is an indisputable fact that fast food has revolutionized the way we eat food. Despite the risk of health problems relating to fast food such as obesity, high blood pressure or heart disease-which occasionally seen in people who consume fast food to excess-most of us benefited greatly from this kind of food such as convenience and quickie of it. These positive aspects facilitate us save time in preparing and cooking a meal.

Equally importantly, cost for fast food is lower than any other kind of food. In earlier times, conducting a meal entailed a lot of money for a vast kind of food such as vegetable, meat, beef, pepper etc. Now, however, the meal can be accessed by one dollar or even less than. Admittedly, not all of fast food available at store is cheap or low cost-there are some kind of fast food that some would consider expensive or even luxury ranging from hamburger to fried chicken. Nonetheless, i would contend that this aspect of fast food has been a competitive advantage compared to others.

By way of conclusion, i once again reaffirm my position that fast food has had a positive impact on human eating habits because of it conveniences and its price.

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stephy7658 3 / 6 3  
Jul 21, 2014   #2
i think you should write both side of views. Usually when the topic says ''some ppl think...while others think that...'',, it is better to write a both-side article even though you only support for one side. A balanced opinion may be more easier to discuss.

Since you support the view that fast food is a positive trend, firstly you can write some reasons why ppl believe that it is a negative trend. But you don't have to use too many words, you should only list some reasons of this argument.

In the next paragraph, you can say that you think the benefits of fast food outweigh the disadvantages. Then expand your ideas like what you've written, to refute the other side of view.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jul 22, 2014   #3
Good introduction ... You have good writing skills :)

Despite the risk of health problems relating to fast food ..

I wish you shortened this sentence. Your point here is that fast foods offer convenient and efficient solutions for our food needs. So, give more focus to that as it is the reason you need to put forward to defend your opinion. So talk about the importance of such solution to our busy lifestyles. You can give very specific examples to support your point :)


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