IELTS: The factors that contribute for happiness

Happiness is considered very important in life.

Why is it difficult to define?

What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Nobody does not want to get happiness. However, the definition of happiness varies among individuals. The longly ones want friends, the poors demand wealth, while the fresh graduates expect good jobs. It is just because every person has different demand in his/her life, so diversity of definition of happiness can be found. Then how to achieve happiness? In the paper, I will talk about the issue.

At first, one has to be confident that he/she can get happiness. Nobody was born to be upset. Being upset is only some minimal and short interruption in one's all life. While most of the daily life is just being common or average, so what we should do is enjoying the daily life and find out happiness. Some of colleague are always happy and smile to others even though they live nearly the some lives as others. So, awareness of happiness is an important factor in achieving happiness.

Secondly, having a dream and struggling for the dream is another essential factor in getting happiness. Ones holding dreams know what they want and what they do not want. So they can step towards happiness directly without hesitation. Take me as an example. The day I got a place in a research institute, I achieved my true happiness, since I dreamed to be a scientist from my childhood. The happiness overweighed all the tasty food I ever ate and all the pretty dress I weared. I thought I was the most happy person in the world even though I looked so common.

In conclusion, believing we can achieving happiness and holding a dream is the two main factor for people to get happiness. Other factos, such as good relationship with others, rich materials and good jod, are also associated to happiess. But this does not mean that we cannot get it without these factors.

Hello
try this version:


the lonely ones want friendship

"get happiness" does not sound very appealing. "Happiness" generally goes with "find happiness" .... Also try to present your ideas in a more simple, yet interesting way... "nobody" and "not" get the reader to shake his head and find out what you mean. I think it's good for you give less work for the reader :D

.... For example,
Everybody seeks happiness and nobody wants to be unhappy.


... good!


.... "lonely" is the right word which means feeling lonely




... also link this idea to your topic;
The lonely people think they'd be happy when they find company; the poor would day dream of having wealth thinking that it would make them happy.


... this is not a good sentence.... it's pretty confusing :(

Hai Han..

Your essay is good. But the ideas in it is confusing. i personally believe that the dream and the straggling to achieve it is the main reason of unhappiness. The dream job in Australia and continuous failure in IELTS w,r,l,s any one is dropping each attempt. How he will be happy....?....).

According to me...happiness....

contentment and peace of mind is the basic thing. we should live within our means and know our strengths and weakness,
avoid unfair means to resort wealth,
make and maintain good friendships,
freedom of worries and anxieties,
Maintain good health, well balanced diet, regular proper exercise, adequate rest.
positive attitude., unselfishness
good hobbies to fill the leisure time.
good relationship with family and friends.
a clear conscience.
emotional intelligence

not every poor man is unhappy and not every rich man happy...

all the best..

Tessy

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