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IELTS extinction of languages in globalization are highly considered problematic


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Jul 4, 2013, 06:51am   #1
IELTS task 2:
Every year several languages die out, Some people think that this is not
important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?



Few languages have been used extensively as official international communication for centuries. This situation has resulted in extinction of other less frequent spoken languages. Although some people believe that life would be simpler with one or two languages than in the past, this tends to have more disadvantages.

Unsurprisingly, English as widely-accepted language plays an integral role not only on international business but also on effective communication to foreigners. Chinese, another example, is also spoken globally because of the highest Chinese population in the world. Such circumstance affects people to abandon their mother tongue in order to acquire more widespread used languages as mentioned. In addition, the internet is so easily accessible that has an influence on language popularity.

On the contrary, disappearance of several languages is highly likely to cause the loss of national identity. For instance, people imitate not only clothing but also eating habit like Mc Donald or KFC and ignore their traditional food. It will subsequently lead to vanishing of invaluable heritage and tradition. It is therefore essential for authorities to promote the essence of their native language. One effective strategy is to broadcast language channel to their people.

To sum up, extinction of several languages in globalization are highly considered problematic despite of easier communication. Government should solve this problem in terms of encourage people how importance of their mother tongue to prevent loss of national identity.
Jul 4, 2013, 07:17am   #2
fred123:
Few languages have been used extensively as official international communication for centuries
....... official international? I think it reads better if you take off "international"
fred123:
This situation has resulted in extinction of other less frequently spoken languages

This reason has resulted in extinction of other minority dialects.
fred123:
Although some people believe that life would be simpler with one or two languages than in the past, this tends to have more disadvantages.

fred123:
Unsurprisingly, English as widely-accepted language plays an integral role not only on not only in international business but also on as an effective communication to foreigners mode between nations.

fred123:
Unsurprisingly, English as widely-accepted language plays an integral role not only on international business but also on effective communication to foreigners. Chinese, another example, is also spoken globally because of the highest Chinese population in the world. Such circumstance affects people to abandon their mother tongue in order to acquire more widespread used languages as mentioned. In addition, the internet is so easily accessible that has an influence on language popularity.
........... in this para, your reason is not clear. Is it Chinese that fades off.............. You need to elaborate on this more.
Jul 4, 2013, 08:23am   #3
fred123:
On the contrary, disappearance of several languages is highly likely to cause the loss of national identity.

On the other hand, the language is an important aspect of one's identity. Therefore disappearance of a language means that one would loose his or her identity in terms of culture, community etc..
fred123:
For instance, people imitate not only clothing but also eating habit like Mc Donald or KFC and ignore their traditional food.I
.......... well......... give an example to suite your reason direct. Have an example that has a direct link with the language. This example is out of topic. :(
fred123:
To sum up, extinction of several languages in globalization are is highly considered highly problematic despite of it, in a way, provides easier communication.
.............. this is not well written........ you need to re-phrase this line.



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