I just want to refine my language, and make the essay look more native.
Okay, I'll make some changes for you to study.
Do not say "learn knowledge."
There are a lot of different ways for people to
learn gain knowledge.
Oh, here is another one:
...makes him or her think
thoughtfully carefully and critically.--Do not say "think thoughtfully."
When encountering some problems, he or she could consider them from variable angles, trying to figure out solutions from different
aspects perspectives.---Again, this is not a big deal, but I am just trying to refine it.
...from the manufacturing industry to finance industry, and even in some newly
development developing fields.
:-)