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The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the culture of these countries.Do you agree?


z_ansari 1 / 1  
Aug 13, 2014   #1
Recently, showing foreign-made programs on television is certainly a matter of debate whether is a blessing or a curse. Some people believe that it causes many problems and some believe those are useful. In this essay, advantages and disadvantages of it and also some reasons are enlightened.

One justification is that diversity attracts more Tv-viewers, so for satisfying this need television shows foreign-made programs. For example, many people prefer to watch Chinese, Japanese, Turkish, American programs because they can see different things and enjoy more. Secondly, some countries do not have enough resources, so the best way for them is that they broadcast those programs. Last but not certainly least is lack of skilled and talented individuals for some countries and if they hired some talented people from other countries, it would cost a lot of money.

Moreover, supporters believe that it has some advantages that can be considered. Firstly, people who watch television can be familiar to other cultures and get some information. For example, they can get information about religious beliefs, climate, race and so on. Secondly, programs are available in a wide variety of cultures and different points of view, so people accept them easily because they like diversity.

However, local culture in many countries has become more and more affected. One of deep-rooted problems that opponents considered is that individuals may know those countries through theirs programs although all of those are not real and a little exaggeration has been involved in. For instance, most of action, drama, and horror movies which have been made by Hollywood are fiction. Finally, some people, depend on their age and points of view may copy and apply what they watch on television, which changes their lives. The bottom line is that what has been applied and copied is against their cultures and cannot be adopted.

By considering two points of view, opponents' and supporters', the subject of dominance of imported entertainment is highly complicated multifaceted, but in my opinion, although many disadvantages can be considered for it, these programs can be harmful just for those people who do not think about all aspects of what they copy and apply in their lives.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Aug 13, 2014   #2
Hi, Zahra...Welcome to this forum
One of the forum rule is adding the purpose, it is for IELTS, TOEFL or others, and the prompt (an essay question). Once you start your new threat further, you can type it in the subject box. It is beneficial for other member to give appropriate advice. Considering about essay's layout, I mean please put a space between your paragraphs

Secondly, some countries do not have enough resources, so the best way for them is that they broadcast those programs.

them is not clearly referred, which countries they are ?

hopefully it helps and keep writing
OP z_ansari 1 / 1  
Aug 14, 2014   #3
Hello and thank you so much for your feedback. It is for IELTS, and I'm sorry I didn't follow the rules.
next time, I will write better.and could you please tell me how my writing is totally?
Thanks again.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Aug 14, 2014   #4
I'm sorry I didn't follow the rules

Nevermind Zahra :). This is commonly occured for new member

Would you kindly give us the prompt (the question given) and the purpose of your essay. While you completed your essay with these information, not only me but also another forum members could give you appropriate feedbacks :D.


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