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IELTS Task 1 : Diagram of Earthquake-resistant buildings


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Jan 23, 2014   #1
The diagrams on the right show two types of building design that help reduce the effects of earthquakes.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

answer :
The figures are apartment block and house which build it the volcanic area. In each of building have sameness and also differences aspect include that interested to see more.

Rectangular, is the grand shape of the figures. However, the other similarity is from roof which is made by concrete, and also the steel pillars buried deep into the ground. The apartment block contain of rubber that absorb shocks in the ground level to move perform.

Heigh, is the main main differences of the buildings. In contrast, apartment is taller than house, so metal support to strengthen interlinear wall purpose is used. In the other hand, house construct with hollow brick to lessen damage when it falls.

Next, reutilize stone is placed to build house floor. It can be the best combinations to scaffold strengthen of pillar steel. Moreover, high-rise building contains of sprinkler system. It is such a modern feature service and benefitted for prevent residence from fire.



dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jan 23, 2014   #2
The figures are apartment block and house which build it the volcanic area.

The diagrams illustrate two types of buildings that are designed to reduce the damages of earthquakes.

In each of building have sameness similarities and also differences aspect include that interested to see more.

.... this sentence is very counfusing. You need to re-write this again. Also, this line should go to the next para (overview) because it reveals a major observation.

The buildings have both similarities and differences
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 23, 2014   #3
Height, is the main main differences of the buildings.

In contrast, apartment is taller than house, so metal support to strengthen interlinear wall purpose is used.

The apartment is taller compared to the house and it had used metal support to strengthen interlinear wall for that purpose.
You need to improve your grammar and sentence structures a lot. Write short sentences and avoid writing lengthy sentences.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 12, 2014   #4
improve your grammar and sentence structures a lot. Write short sentences and avoid writing lengthy sentences

you noted the big one. Sure I have to take effort for this.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Feb 24, 2014   #5
Rectangular, is the grand shape of the figures.

and

Heigh, is the main main differences of the buildings

In between a subject and a verb, there is no a comma.

apartment is taller than house, so metal support to strengthen interlinear wall purpose is used.

To tell you the truth, this is a very very very bad sentence. I strongly suggest you to find out materials discussing how to construct better sentences.

InOn the other hand,

If you want to take IELTS exam as early as possible, please pay particular attention to grammar and whole points in the table of IELTS writing descriptors.


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