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Destruction of the world's forests amounts to death of the world we currently know.


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Jun 19, 2011, 03:54am   #1
I am trying to improve my writing ability, so I will be writing quite a few essay to get some opinion from you guys. Be as criticizing as possible, I can take it!!!!! Criticism is the catalyst to improvement! Thank you!

Forests are important to our Ecosystem. They account for the majority of oxygen's production on Earth, and they are also homes and food source to many animals. Without a doubt, the destruction of forests will diminish our oxygen production, and the lives of many animals. Therefore, due to the forests roles in majority of the earth's oxygen production and being home for many animals, the destruction of forests will definitely causes the death of our world.

Oxygen is an essential element in keeping living organism alive, and majority of its production comes from forests. Plants inside forests produce oxygen through photosynthesis a combination of chemical reactions that coverts carbon dioxide into oxygen. But if this production is diminished, there will certainly be a rapid decline in the amount of oxygen on Earth, and this can potentially wipe out many organisms on Earth. Therefore, the destruction of forests will make it extremely difficult for many oxygen dependent organisms to thrive.

Forests are also home to many animals. Forests provide secure shelter and food source for many animals to thrive on Earth. Because of the resources forests provide, those animals can flourish and reproduce, thus balancing the ecosystem. However, upon the destruction of forests, many animals will be forcefully evicted from their homes, and this process can result in extinction of many species. As many species of animals depend on other species to survive, the extinction of one species can create a chain of extinction among other species, which can devastate the Earth's ecosystem. At the end, the collapsing of the ecosystem will turn the Earth into a lifeless planet.

In summary, the destruction of forests directly impacts life on Earth. The majority production of oxygen on Earth will be tampered by the destruction of forests, as well as the balance of the ecosystem. Without Forests, Earth will become nothing but a former shadow of her vigorous self.

Hei Simone!

Forests are important to our Eecosystem. They account for the majority of oxygen's production on Earth, and they are also homes and food sources to many animals. Without a doubt, the destruction of forests will diminish our oxygen production, and hamper the lives of many animals. Therefore, due to the fForests roles in majority of the earth's are major oxygen productioners and being home offer shelter for many animals,. As a result their destruction of forests will definitely causes result in the death of our world.

Oxygen is an essential element in keeping living organisms alive, and majority of its production comes from it is mainly produced in forests. Plants inside forests produce generate oxygen through photosynthesis a combination of chemical reactions that coverts carbon dioxide into oxygen. But if this production process is diminished (/hindered), there will certainly be a rapid decline in the amount of oxygen on Earth, and this can potentially wipe out many organisms on Earth. Therefore, the destruction of forests will make it extremely difficult for many oxygen dependent organisms to thrive.

Forests are also home to many animals. Forests They provide secure shelters and food sources for many animals to thrive(/prosper, survive) on Earth. Because of the resources forests provide, those animals can flourish and reproduce, thus balancing the ecosystem. However, upon the destruction of forests, many animals will be forcefully evicted from their homes, and this process can result in extinction of many species. As many species of animals depend on other species to survive, the extinction of one species can create a chain of extinction among other species, which can devastate the Earth's ecosystem. At the end, the collapsinge of the ecosystem will turn the Earth into a lifeless planet.

In summary, the destruction of forests directly impacts life on Earth. The majority production of oxygen productionon Earth will be tampered diminished by the destruction of forests, as well as the balance of the ecosystem ruined. Without Forests, the Earth will become nothing but a former shadow of her(its) vigorous self.

You have no structural problems, but your essay is pretty common. Perhaps you could pick an interesting subject next time, since many like this one have been overused. Choose one that will allow you to write whatever you feel like writing. ;D

One big minus: you repeat a lot of words!!! ("forests" exp.) Try using a synonym dictionary or simply expand your paragraphs. (However this is to be expected when it comes to short essays like this one. Another reason to choose a more versatile subject.)

Good luck on improving your essays! :D
Jun 19, 2011, 05:06am   #3
I am trying to improve my writing in preparation for the upcoming test, I am just randomly picking topics from the internet. I wonder if there is a faster way than this..
Well, to be honest such essays are a waste of time. And I'm sure they are the same essays you've been writing since you were a kid.

Pick a subject that:
- will require you to analyze matters from different perspectives
- will allow you to express a personal opinion [everyone on this planet is against/for deforesting (just two possibilities there)]
- will make the reader ask himself questions (it should stimulate his/her brains)

In my opinion that would be an interesting essay :3 The subject must not sound interesting. I'm sure you can write something awesome on politics/voting. You could for example compare the politic organization of the Greek polis with our current notion of democracy. Essays on historical figures are also a good option. Or ... dunno, write about what being a writer means and if anyone can be a writer. Or what originality is. Or look quotes up and write something based on one of them.
The possibilities are endless ;D
...the destruction of forests will diminish oxygen production and the quality of life for many animals.

Therefore, due to the forest's...

be careful... don't capitalize unnecessarily: Without Forests forests, Earth will become nothing but a former shadow of her vigorous self.----Nice sentence!

At this point, your writing is so good that I think you should just let yourself naturally improve. Just read and write about your interests. Follow your aspirations, and you'll perfect your English along the way. Get Strunk & White.

:-)



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