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IELTS-TASK1-Describing changes taking place at an island


yucky 6 / 9 7  
Aug 25, 2013   #1
TOPIC: The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelents.

The maps show the development which took place at an island in an attempt to turn the area into a tourist attraction.
Before the alteration, the island was a much greener area with more-opened spaces . There was a beach in the west shore of the island , a few trees distributed on the east and west parts and no buildings. After a myriad of changes, although the number of trees remained, the island had converted into a modern area with many tourist facilities.

There were two accomdation groups erecting in form of huts with footpaths coming within each. In terms of beach, it had been built into a swimming spot connected to the western accomodation units also by a footpath. Futher constructions were a restaurant emerged in the north of the area and a reception built in the island's centre. A vehicle track ran from the restaurant to south , surrounded the reception on its way . It can be seen that sailing boats were also put into use after the construction of a pier on the south shore of the island.

Overall, a comparion between the two maps reveals a transformation from a large rural area to a luxury resort.

Maps: englishwithyeasir.blogspot.co.uk/2013/04/ielts-writing-part-i.html
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Aug 25, 2013   #2
Where are thd maps? You should have uploaded them using the " attach file" feature . It's good to have it because then we can understand what it presents.

Also, make sure you post all IELTS essays into Writing Feedback forum.

The maps show the development which took place atin an island in an attempt to turn the area into a tourist attraction.
OP yucky 6 / 9 7  
Aug 26, 2013   #3
I did have a link to the map in my post though.
And I thought I posted it on the Feedback Forum.
Guess Im gonna repost it. Is it OK to repost it?
seabird88 2 / 3 1  
Aug 27, 2013   #4
There was a beach in the west shore of the island , a few trees distributed on the east and west parts and no buildings

==> should not use and 2 times.
no building except a few trees distributed in the eastern and western parts of the island

Second, there is no exact time in the map. So, we should use present tense in the essay.


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