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IELTS - Death Penalty Committing Murder, Climate Change, Mass media shape ideas


tashappleaddict 2 / 1  
Jul 5, 2012   #1
By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this statement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Essay

Spending the rest of lives to be in a jail is claimed to be better than death penalty. In some extent, I agree with this statement because people need to realize their faults and give people time to change. This essay will describe for and against lives in prison for the rest of lives or death penalty.

To some extent, I agree because a person needs time to change and realize their faults. If a person who is wrong and killed directly, they cannot do something better to their society. Then if a person actually does not wrong and the authorities catch the wrong person, it will not be fair. Some people do criminal also because they are forced, for example a girl got rape she need to do something to defend her self. Some religions also do not support death penalty because it is a kind of killing someone. People who deserve death penalty in my opinion is people who kill many people for doing crime. For example terrorists who skipped from the police and when authorities caught him, he deserves to be killed.

Death penalty is also more expensive than life in prison. Based on articles I have read before, the average costs of an executed for a criminal is $ 2 millions and average costs of life in prison is around $40.000 to $50.000 for 30/40 years. In my opinion, killing is also inhumane. How to throw the death body from a criminal is also complicated. It is better for a criminal to die naturally than being killed. We also need to think about their families, it will be more sad for the family to see dead bodies because of death penalty. Overall, I do not agree with death penalty except for person who are wanted and doing the same criminal often.

In conclusion, death penalty is life in prison is better because criminals can realize and think of their faults. Death penalty is inhumane and also more expensive. Executed is needed only for wanted people and do the same criminals for many time.

Scientists and the news media are presenting ever more evidence of climate change. Goverments cannot be expected to solve this problem. It is the responbility of individuals to change their lifestyle to prevent further damage. What are your views ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples for your own knowledge and experience

Essay

Global warming is a world biggest problem, and we cannot decide who should be responsible with climate change problem. In my opinion, everyone should be obliged with it. This essay will discuss every person responsibility to change their lifestyle to reduce the effect of global warming.

Actually, we all need to work together as a team to reduce the bad effect of global warming. Because the effects of global warming are more dangerous for the world. Fish in the sea die because some of fisherman bombs the sea to get a lot of fish in the short period of time. The icecaps in the pole melts, it can make the habitats in the pole can die because they cannot lives in a hot area.

Government also can reduce the effect of climate change by giving prizes and counselings to people who can do something to prevent the effect of global warming. In my country, there is an award called Adipura for a city who can treat the environment friendly. So the Adipura program can make citizens of the city save the environment because it will be a pride for a country if they win Adipura.

I believe that all of the world citizen also can do something to minimize the effects of climate change. First, we can reuse, recycle, and plant trees as many as we can. For example, we can use reuse bottle for water instead of consuming bottled water, also we can recycle paper and use it for wrapping paper, also provide more green areas by planting trees in our yard. Second, we can reduce the uses of cars of change our cars to an enviromentally friendly cars, because too many uses of cars can increase air pollution. For example, we can go by bicycle or walk for going to a place which is near, and also use green cars, electric cars, or fuel emission cars. Third, we can reduce the uses of plastic bags by reuse bags, because plastics take years to decompose. For example, in some supermarkets in my country, they provide reuse bags for shopping that lasts long, so we can buy the bag in the supermarket and every time we go for shopping we can use the reuse bags.

In short, global warming is a world biggest problem. Everyone has responsibilities to reduce the effect of global warming. Both governments and the citizens can do something to prevent climate change.

The mass media, including television, radio, and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ? Give reasons for your answer

Essay
It is claimed that mass media for example televisions, radios, and newspapers affect people to build some ideas. I do agree that mass media can be related to people's way of thinking. This essay will discuss the impact of mass media for shaping people's ideas.

Firstly, in entertaiment, people can have idea how to cook recipes after watching cooking shows. Reading articles or watching places for vacation can make people will plan to go there, for example : raja ampat and karimun jawa for diving and many divers visit there. There are many culinary shows in television stations, giving reviews about good restaurants to eat and hosted by culinary experts. New songs or a new album from famous singers that we can watch on the music show or listen from the radio will make we want to download or want to buy the albums. However, there is also bad impact of watching mass media, for example children whose watching smack down, a show that contains violence will make children practice it at school and caused accidents.

Secondly, in news, people can watch, listen, or read recent news around the country or even around the world. After watching natural disasters ( earthquake, tsunami ) victims in other cities they will be sad, sympathy, and give money. News about election that discuss one of candidate is not good, they will not choose. Recent news about what happens in a country or in a city that family members lives there also can make people can call their families to make sure everything is okay. For example when my city was attacked by earth quake on 27 May 2006, my uncle from Jakarta directly called us after heard the news about the earthquake.

Thirdly, in advertisements, people will know new products and also looking for jobs. Advertisements of new snacks will make children want to try it and will buy it if they go to supermarkets. For women, new cosmetics products that shows beautiful woman or famous actress with flawless skin will make many women buy the product. For example people will buy a product that offers less acnes eventhough the product is expensive. Credit card advertisements that have many promotions will also make people apply credit card from the bank. On the other hand, advertisements also have advantages for people who want to get jobs, they can see the jobs vacancies and apply jobs.

In conclusion, mass media can give ideas about what people will do. There are also three kinds of mass media impact in entertaiment, news, and advertisements. Mass media become people's basic for doing things.

Hi everyone, I have sat on IELTS almost the third times because I need 6 band, can everyone help me to reach my 6 band ? Thank you
peterc 14 / 52  
Jul 5, 2012   #2
Hi tashappleaddict,

Here's some advices:
- there are too many words in the essay. 280-320 should be enough.
- there are too many examples in the same paragraph. e.g. 3 examples in the third paragraph in 2nd essay. Try to cut it short by using less words or simply taking 1 example away.

- most importantly...relax. Don't think too much about the band. The content of your essays are good in general. Keep up!
Jeslyn 2 / 1  
Jul 6, 2012   #3
Maybe in the first essay, you wanna say
"Life in prison is better than death penalty. Because - "
not
"death penalty is life in prison is better because criminals can realize and think of their faults. "


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