Many people believe internet bring more disadvantages than advantages. What do you think?
There is nothing in this world we can call "perfect". That is the reason why we can not expect "the Perfectly good internet". As it is not perfect, the internet has both advantages and disadvantages which is open to debate for many times. To my point of view, I strongly believe that the good or bad influence of internet is depend on us.
On the one hand, the internet plays an integral part in an integrated and developed world. It is impossible to gain information quickly from all corners of the world just by using the traditional ways. But with internet, we can see a huge stepping- stone in our life: gaining information in a lightning speed, having distance education just by staying at home and learning online lesson, watching the lives in different parts of the world, even the milky way which is billions of light years far from us. Besides, we can also use the Internet as a tool to make friends, exchange languages or entertain without worrying about the geographical barrier. How can we imagine about a world missing this miraculous device in one day? We can not deny or replace the benefits of the internet, especially in a world which is developing every second.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that the Internet also bring about harm to our lives. As the Internet accelerates the speed of Information, there are tons of harmful and useless information is out of control. If we do not prepare or perceive how dangerous they are, we can easily be affected in mental and have a poor vision about life. That is why we can see the number of crimes has been increasing fearfully since the internet was invented, including sexual crime, murder, stealing, etc. Another disadvantage of the internet is the crowd psychology. For centuries, we've never seen an influence of crowd as huge as the time social networks have developed. For instance, one man can post a picture or status on Facebook, if it is weird, isolated or has shocking content, he can easily become famous. However, not all the fame is good. Some is famous for being criticized and belittled for posting unhealthy things on Internet. And believe or not, it can be taken advantages by people who want to defame another person. On top of that, experts have also showed that using too much Internet can have a bad affect to our health. We can easily have aches, dizzies and diabetes if we stay in one position for a long time. So can we put the internet into the word "perfect"?
To cut a long story short, we can not critique Internet good or bad. It is a multifauceted problem. We also can not expect a perfect plan to have the completely beneficial Internet, but what we can do is using Internet wisely and efficiently to utilize the advantages of the most fabulous device of the 21th century.
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- On the oneother hand, the internet plays an integral part in an integrated and developed world.
- It is impossible to gain information quickly from all corners of the world just by using thethe traditional waysway .
- But with internet, we can see a huge stepping- stone in our life:; gaining information in a lightning speed, having distance education just by staying at home and learning online lesson, watching the lives inlife as it unfolds in different parts of the world, even the milky way which is billions of light years far from us.
- How Can we imagine about a world missingthe world without this miraculous device in one day?
- We can notcannot deny or replace the benefits of the internet, especially in a world which is developing every second.
- As the Internet accelerates the speed of Information, there are tons of harmful and useless information is out of control.
- If we do not prepare or perceive how dangerous they are, we can easily be affected in mentalmentally and have a poor vision about life.
- We can easily have muscle aches, dizziesdizziness and diabetes if we stay in one position for a long time. So can we put the internet into the word "perfect"?
Phoenix, your essay is written well, as you can see I only made a few grammar corrections, it's may seem a few but grammar corrections are major ones so I suggest you work on that on your next article. You also have to work on the following;
- use of linking verbs
- word choice
Overall, this is a good piece to read.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!
