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It is a highly debatable issue that majority countries have a similar problem with high level of crime, therefore government should suggest best ways to reduce high crime rate.
...looks grammatically alright, but sounds poor in its presentation. Start with a more catchy sentence because it's the first impression you make on the reader about your writing.
It is assumed that root of the problem is owing to a number of unemployed people.
... again this sounds confusing.... do you mean "unemployment" is the root cause for this issue? However, there are many crimes that have been committed by professionals and employed people... I think it's much more complicated when it comes to reasons for committing crimes.