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IELTS: The contribution of agriculture, manufacturing and business sectors to the UK economy


manutd9111993 3 / 10 2  
Jul 29, 2014   #1
The chart provides the information about the proportion of agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial services in the UK economy from 1900 to 2000.

It can be clearly seen from the data that there was a downward trend in the percentage of manufacturing while the figure for business and financial went up over the period. In 1900, agriculture contributed the largest part to the UK economy with 50%, followed by manufacturing with about 40% and the remaining part was of business and financial. In 1950, agriculture was still the leader with over 50%. The figure for manufacturing fell slightly to 40% but considerably higher than that for business and financial. 25 years later, agriculture witnessed a substantial drop to only 10% whereas business and financial doubled the percentage in 1950. In 2000, business and financial was the biggest contributor to the UK economy with 35% with manufacturing coming second (15%) and the last one was agriculture.


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eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 29, 2014   #2
agriculture

write agricultural sectors

business and financial

business and financial sectors.
OP manutd9111993 3 / 10 2  
Jul 29, 2014   #3
Thanks a lot for your help eddies :)
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Jul 29, 2014   #4
IELTS task 1 requires the examinee to write at least 150 words. Adding more words in this report will increase your mark.

Intro: simply paraphrase the question given.

The bar chart shows the contribution of three sectors in UK economic development from 1900 to 2000.

It can be clearly seen from the data that there was a downward trend in the percentage of manufacturing while the figure for business and financial went up over the period.

In your overview you need to add the information about agriculture sector changes too while it depicts in the chat
OP manutd9111993 3 / 10 2  
Jul 29, 2014   #5
In your overview you need to add the information about agriculture sector changes too while it depicts in the chat

Is that really necessary ? Would you mind giving me an example of the overview sentence for this ?
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Aug 2, 2014   #6
Would you mind giving me an example of the overview sentence for this ?

I'd love too

Overall, agriculture sector experienced a decrease in the UK economic condition, as opposed to the Business and Financial sector whose rates inceased significantly during the period. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the percentage of Manufacturing sector.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Aug 23, 2014   #7
Between the intro and the body paras, insert an Overview which gives an overall idea to the reader :)

It can be clearly seen from theThe data shows that there was a downward trend in the percentage of manufacturing while the figure for business and financial went up over the period.

This is a task aimed at assessing your report writing skills. Adopt a more report writing tone for this task!

Well, I can see you have good writing skills. However, you should follow the approach eddies has suggested very very seriously :) You need to present your writing in a more logically organized sequence and what eddies has proposed is the best, in my view :)


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