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"Don't confuse money with happiness! "Money and Happiness


azulrongjie 1 / 1  
Jun 10, 2013   #1
nstruction: 150 words. After reading the following news, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic "Happiness on a Budget". You should write at least 150 words. (news: google 'Happiness on a Budget')

Don't confuse money with happiness. It is one thing to buy the things needed in daily life, and yet it is quite another to be respected. Since money is the necessary substance we have to rely on, it is easy to understand why some believe that more money means more happiness.

More money, however, does not mean that one will be more happiness. Indeed, sometimes average family is happier than the rich family. To begin with, happiness often comes from the process of pursuing one's dream. These pursuing is motivated by the desire to money, but the rich hasn't this desire. Moreover, money can not buy everything. Money can buy cars, beautiful dresses, houses, but the more significant things, such as love, friendship, health, is priceless.

In a word, there is no arguing the importance of money, but happiness mainly comes from love, friendship, health, and the process of pursuing dream.
Veronicacowen69 - / 1  
Jun 11, 2013   #2
Nice topic and very good writing with good English, there is not any mistake as far as I know !!!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 11, 2013   #3
It is one thing to buy the things needed in daily life, and yet it is quite another to be respected.

.... For me, I feel this needs some improvement in terms of clarity of your idea, especially the latter part. Is this what you mean?
It is true that a quality life, for which the money plays an important role, makes you happy and contented. But is it the only factor that makes us happy?

I feel you better define what happiness is.... it is a mental status which is contributed by various factors. Then show that money is only one factor and support your argument with real life examples.
OP azulrongjie 1 / 1  
Jun 14, 2013   #4
Veronicacowen69
thank you. But as a no-native speaker, I could not find some errors in your essays.

sogeily
thank you. I'd like to read your essays.

dumi

thank you for your help. You are right. But 150 words can't do so much.


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