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IELTS: The concept of only mothers raising their kids has become an old one


IEC 1 / -  
Dec 6, 2012   #1
Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree?

The concept of only mothers raising their kids has become an old one. I strongly support the idea that it is also a responsibility of the father in bringing up their children for several reasons.

The most important reason is that in this fast growing world, women are also working hard to earn money. After putting several hours of work outside the house, helping the kids with their homework, making meals for them etc becomes an extremely difficult task for the mother. This is why fathers should also chip in. This would bring balance to the duties of both the parents.

A further reason is that, from psychological point of view, if the mother spends more amount of time with her child, it is obvious that the child will be deprived of paternal love and care. This in turn will make a child more dependent on the mother and less close to the father.

Finally, from educational perspective, there are certain things that only a mom can teach her kid whereas he learns a few skills exclusively from the father. For example, a mother can teach soft skills such as communicating and interacting with people while the father can teach some tough skills which are required to survive the harsh realities of life.

In conclusion, I am of the opinion that both the parents are equally responsible for bringing up their kid. This will help to avoid conflict between the couple. Also, the child will develop his all round personality under the loving care and guidance of both the parents. Finally, the learning process of the kid will get a boost with the intervention of the mother as well as the father.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Dec 6, 2012   #2
A further reason

Another reason

from psychological point of view

from a psychological point of view

from educational perspective

from an educational perspective

For example, a mother can teach soft skills such as communicating and interacting with people while the father can teach some tough skills which are required to survive the harsh realities of life.

Though this is what usually happens I don't quite agree with the idea. Mothers are more than capable of teaching their children about the hardships in life. There are plenty of single mothers who are doing a wonderful job with their kids.

Overall though, I think your essay is good. You have constructed it well.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 6, 2012   #3
The concept of only mothers raising their kids has become an old one.

Well.... this is a controversial statement... you would offend many fathers ...lol

there are certain things that only a mom can teach her kid whereas he learns a few skills exclusively from the father.

the highlighted part is not clear.... whom do you mean by he?

Your structure is pretty good and Pahan has fixed some grammar errors for you....
Overall, it is a simple essay that follows the right structure and eligible to earn good marks :D
Mommmmo 5 / 15 2  
Dec 7, 2012   #4
making meals for them etc becomes an extremely difficult task for the mothers. This is why fathers should also chip in. This would bring balance to theparenthood duties of both theparents father and mother.

moreamount of time

deprived of paternal love and care

maybe not deprived, I'm more prefer ignore

This in turn will make a child more dependent onthe mother and less close to the father.

there are certain things that only a mom can teach her kid whereas he learns a few skills exclusively from the father

I'm also confused by this sentences like Pahan and Dumi... Maybe rewrite it more clear....


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