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Essay to Compare your Two Teachers


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Mar 3, 2009, 02:13am   #1
My English teacher and my Maths teacher are the two teachers who i admire most. They have commons in many respects, but one striking difference between them impress much on me.Firstly, they are both enthusiastic. My English teacher always tries his best to help us with studying English, especially, learning to speaking frequently. My Maths teacher, likewise, willingly answers our question anytime we ask even when we are out of class. He even create an email so that we can send our question about Maths to this. Secondly, both of them have a good sense of humor. For instance, my English teacher always starts a lesson with a funny story or a quiz so as to attract our attention to his lecture. In the same way, my Maths teacher often tell us a piece of funny story to help us relax when we feel tired or stressed. However, there is one typical difference between them is their attitudes to our studying. My English teacher is very easy, he can easily forgive for our mistakes and remind us not repeat it. On the other hand, my Maths teacher is very strict to us. He will never forgive us if we makes mistakes. Once I got traffic jam and came class late for about 10 minutes and he did not let me come in. He gave a rule that " no one can come in class after him".

This essay has good form. Focus on clarity making sure you complete the thought you are trying to convey for ex:

When you wrote:

My English teacher is very easy, he can easily forgive us for our mistakes and remind us not to repeat them. On the other hand, my Math teacher is stricter with us.

I would reword that sentence that way just for a smoother transition.

Good luck. Unshella
Mar 3, 2009, 07:23am   #3
Unshella, i still not complete my writing. it still not has a conclusion sentence. i got stuck in finding the way to end it. can you suggest me ?
Mar 3, 2009, 12:06pm   #4
What was the exact assignment from your teacher? Is he/she expecting you to have an intro paragraph, a conclusion paragraph, and body paragraphs?

You should probably start by brainstorming and turning those ideas into an outline. Go over the main ideas you want to talk about for your comparison, organize them into different ideas, and make topic sentences for them. Then you can formulate different paragraphs based on these main ideas.

If you only need one paragraph then just keep in mind that your conclusion sentence is basically a restatement of your thesis.
My English teacher and my Maths teacher are the two teachers who I admire most. They have many traits in common, but one striking differences between them also make impressions on me. Firstly, they are both ... my Math teacher often tells us a piece of funny story to help us relax when we feel tired or stressed. However, there is one unmistakable difference between them involves their attitudes toward our studying. My English teacher is very easy, he can easily forgive for our mistakes and remind us not repeat it. On the other hand, my Math teacher is very strict to us. He will never forgive us if we make mistakes. Once I got traffic jam and came class about ten minutes late, and he did not let me come in. He gave a rule that "no one can come in class after him."

Sounds like that teacher was serious about discipline!

Okay, try to use these suggestions to get better with writing. You communicate very clearly already!
Mar 3, 2009, 07:19pm   #6
Here are some more grammatical fixes for you:

"My English teacher and my Maths teacher are the two teachers whom I admire the most."

"but one striking difference between them is particularly noticeable"

"My English teacher always tries his best to help us with studying English, especially encouraging us to speak frequently. "

"he can easily forgive for our mistakes and remind us not repeat them."
Mar 4, 2009, 03:40pm   #8
i would start by making an outline of your essay and fill it in with ideas then pick the best ones that you like the most, you might want to include similarities and differences
Mar 17, 2009, 07:31pm   #10
i agree with snowman...when I make outlines of a subject I'm about to write on, I find that I write much better. Good Luck!



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