This essay was my schoolhomework,my classmates liked it,and my teacher told me 2 post it online, so please rate it (0-10).
Common Sense
If someone will ever ask me what is common sense ,I will not be surprised, because I doubt that if it exists anymore, or even had ever existed! Why? Now that is what I call a silly question! Is war a common sense? No.
George Bernard Shaw once said:"Common sense is an instinct, enough of it geniuses."Well, I disagree, because during my past fifteen years of live, I heard of many geniuses, but never heard how did they use their common sense to stop war, distruction, or even anything. Even a great king can not think in common sense. For example, Creon, the king of Thebs, he killed his niece so noone would think is weak. But as a result, he lost his family. If a king cannot think in reason, then how can a poor boy who is hungry and have many troubles have common sense. In Romeo and Juliet, why did they call the play a tragedy, simply because their parents have got a headfirst over that stupid grudge .Or the genius person who invented the nuclear bomb, it only caused distruction, but was it wise? No. More examples, okay. Is leaving our parents to travel to find work and never call or vist for several years, to see people dying and never say stop? The answer for all of these is NO!
Well, writing about common sense does not show any common sense at all. Because as I said, it is simply dead, just like love. Love don't live here anymore=common sense is dead! It is more like a legend, like Zoro, which people hoped it existed, but it just doesn't exist.
Thanks 4 reading please rate or grade my work .I am a tenth grader.
i really love what you have written. it should be printed in a newspaper.
only, i hoped it was longer than that .otherwise , your ideas are very clear.
next time , it is preferable to be a little bit optimist. especially, when you will adresse to other people by your writing.
If someone will ever ask me what is common sense(ASK ME WHAT COMMEN SENCE IS-it is not a question) ,... No.
..., but never heard how did they use their common sense to stop war, distruction, or even anything(be specific, anything like what?).
Even a great king can not think in common sense. For example, Creon, the king of Thebs, he killed (CREON, THE KING OF THEBS, KILLED...)his niece(WHY DID HE KILL HER?) so noone would think is weak. But as a result, he lost his family(HE KILLED HER NIECE, SO HE LOST HIS FAMILY , HOW??). If a king cannot (CANN'T or CAN NOT)think in reason,
Love don't live here anymore=( NEVER USE SYMBOLS IN YOUR WRITING)common sense is dead! It is more like a legend, like Zoro, which people hoped it existed, but it just doesn't existe
you writing
for the ideas 10/10
for the grammar:9/10
so the final score is 9.5/10
Well, I disagree, because during my past fifteen years of life , I heard of many geniuses, but never heard how did they used their common sense to stop war, destruction , or even anything else that is senseless.
Even a great king cannot think in common sense. For example, Creon, the king of Thebs, he killed his niece so no one would think is he was weak. But as a result, he ...
It is more like a legend, like Zoro, which people hoped it existed, but it just doesn't exist. --- I love this line! Very clever.
I don't know how to grade it, because I don't know what criteria is used in your class. There were errors, but the thought is extremely original.
Pure truth right here "If someone will ever ask me what is common sense ,I will not be surprised, because I doubt that if it exists anymore, or even had ever existed!"
Thanks ,I am really glad to know others oppinion ,I liked all the comments, I will try to use them in my other essays.
