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Jan 23, 2012, 09:31pm   #
Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

People attend University for many reasons. For example, new experience, to increase knowledge, career preparation and etc.

First of all, when students present at lecture or class they can get more knowledge. To be more precisely, the lecture which is instructed by professor is valuable. For instance, when I took "peoples of Africa" class our professor shared with his experience and it was so interesting and motivated a lot of students to learn more about this region. Albeit, our professor gave us a chance to go to fill trips I am sure which a life-long memory.

Second of all, compulsory classes allow students to develop their social and communication skills. For example, studying in a team-work will help students to cooperate with the other students. Also, it gives opportunity to learn how to listen and respect others opinion .Furthermore, it would be a good chance to prepare students to their future career.

Last but not least, another reason that classes should be mandatory is to experience both motivation and competition source. While being required to attend classes you would be able to work with other students and for sure there will be competition among them. As result, it will lead to success and achievement of goals.
To sum up, having three reasons which are valuable knowledge, career preparation and rich experience allows me believe that attendance must be compulsory.
Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

People attend University for many reasons. For example,to achieve goals, whether it be a new experience, education to increase knowledge, career preparation and etcor prepare for a career. All of these goals become more attainable when the students attend class.

First of all, When students are present at lecture or in class, they can get more knowledge. To be more precisely, the lecture which is instructed by professor, whose knowledge pertaining to passing the class is valuable. It makes it hard to achieve educational goals if a student wont make the effort to attend and pass the class. The Professor can also inspires students to want to learn more. For instance, when I took "peoples of Africa" class, our professor shared with his experience and it was so interesting and motivated a lot of students to learn more about this region. Albeit, Our professor also gave us a chance to go toon fillfield trips, I am sure which providing a life-long memory.

Second of all, Compulsory classes allow students to develop their social and communication skills. For example, studying in a team-work environment will help students to cooperate with the other students. Also, it gives opportunity to learn how to listen and respect others opinions. Furthermore, since all of these skills are useful in the workplace, it would be a good chance to prepare students to their future careers.

Last but not least, another reason that classes should be mandatory is to experience both motivation and competition source. While being required to attend classes, you would be able to work with other students and for sure there will be experience competition among them. As result, it will lead to success and achievement of goals.
To sum up, having three reasons which are valuable knowledge, career preparation and rich experience allows me to believe that attendance must be compulsory.

Good ideas here that i expanded on to give an idea of how an essay should flow. begin with your thesis(main idea) then explain your idea, then sum up. I personally don't care for "first of all, second of all" so i edited them out... the next paragraph is sufficient to explaining that you are moving on to your next point. :)
There are many wordy moments. I don't think the vocabulary is working for you. Be simple and straightforward. People are looking to understand your essay, and you have to write wary of this fact. There can be a strong core to this essay, I would just work on being direct, and putting more purpose into the essay, if you know what I mean. Take a lot of time to polish it; with enough time, it will be a really nice essay :)
Jan 25, 2012, 04:06am   #
Nice Essay!

People attend University for many reasons. For example, such as to gain new experiences, to increase knowledge and for career preparation and etc.
to prepare for a career.

First of all,ly, when students are present at a lecture or class they can get gain more knowledge. To be more precisely, the lecture which is instructed by professor is valuable. For instance, when I took "peoples of Africa" class our professor shared with his experience and it was so interesting and motivated a lot of students to learn more about thise region. Albeit, Our professor gave us a chance to go to fill (are u referring to field trips?) trips I am sure which a life-long memory.

Second of all, Secondly, compulsory classes allow students to develop their social and communication skills. For example, studying in a team-work will help students to cooperate with the other students. Also, it It also provides opportunities to learn how to listen and to respect others opinion .Furthermore, it would be a good chance to prepare students to for their future career.

Last but not least, aAnother reason that classes should be mandatory is to experience both motivation and competition source because it is a source of competition as well as motivation. While being required to attend classes you one would be able to work with other students and for sure there will be competition among them. As result, it This will lead to success and achievement of goals.
To sum up, having three reasons which are valuable knowledge, career preparation and rich experience allows me believe that attendance must be compulsory. I think you could change your concluding sentence to something else.

Cheers!



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