When it comes to the problem of educating children, whether children should do housework or not has aroused heated discussion. As far as I'm concerned, requiring children to do housework is beyond doubt a benefit for both the children and the family for it teaches children to be responsible as a family member, equips children with necessary skills for independence and strengthens the family ties. Therefore, children should not only play or study without doing any housework.
Good. Still, this intro has a weak thesis statement, since it is not followed by a well-structured outline. Let me give a try;
Should children only play and study without doing any housework?
Well, this prompt is asking whether you are against or not. So, this would be: it is believed that young teenagers should spend more time playing and studying rather than to do some household chores (background). It is agreed that the first two activities bring benefits to children, compared to the latter one (thesis). Firstly, this essay will show the fact that playing and studying increase self-esteem and secondly, discuss how these activities provide a child some opportunities for developing social skills (outline).
As it can be predicted, the outline will be written as the topic sentences in each paragraph. Yet, this essay needs more ideas to cogitate about how housework benefits children as well, so as to present a balanced view, so called a concession statement. For this, here is some concession as per the topics above
- concession 1:
Despite this, people in developed countries believed that if children are given more chances to do some household chores, then the youth will feel happier, as they can make a meaningful contribution to their families.
- concession 2:
However, some may argue that housework is a great way to teach a child about responsibility, since the importance of keeping a house clean is a challenge.
In a word, children should do housework besides playing and studying. Because it is the basic duty of a family member, an indispensable process to independence and a key to maintain good family relationship.
According to the rule of academic writing, a concluding paragraph consists of a restated thesis (plus points of view) and your personal statement: a recommendation, hopes or fears. A closer look at my model answer:
The aforementioned evidence reveals that although doing housework leads children to become more mentally aware at family, studying and playing help them develop their internal and external experiences (the restated thesis plus points of view). It is imperative that these life skills should be introduced in early childhood education (a recommendation).
NB:
grade it out of 5 if you could.
it is an essay with a score of 4.
Since I work with a cellphone, my apologies if I have some problems with spellings :)
Hope this helps, eddy suaib.