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As a child you can enjoy life without responsabilities and worries


carito15 4 / 5  
Feb 13, 2013   #1
When you ask a person in what time do you want to go back, the answer would mostly be childhood. This is because childhood is the happiest time of a person's life.

To start with, when you are a child you have very few responsibilities, you do not have to worry about paying bills, doing the housekeeping chores or going to work. You can enjoy life free of obligations and you have plenty of free time to do what you want - play computer games, watch TV, go out with friends or any other hobby.

What is more, children are innocent and pure human beings. They have an innocent approach to complicated things. Although they can fight, they end up without any kind of grudge, they are also supportive and kind and they will be always willing to help someone who needs help or love.

To sum up, childhood is the best time in a person's life. As a child you can enjoy life without responsabilities and worries and you can face different situations with love and patience without grudge.
kurianjoseph1 8 / 18 7  
Feb 13, 2013   #2
They have an innocent approach to complicated things. Although they can fight, they end up without any kind of grudge, they are also supportive and kind and they will be always willing to help someone who needs help or love. - I think its better writing this in two sentences

Overall your essay is good. If this is for ielts test you need to explain more. But follow the same structure.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Feb 14, 2013   #3
When you ask a person in what time do you want to go back, the answer would mostly be childhood.

When you ask a person to which period of his life he would like to return, naturally his answer would be "Childhood".
Good introduction. Simple and direct. Very good!

To start with, when you are a child you have very few responsibilities; you do not have to worry about paying bills, doing the housekeeping chores or going to work.

.... I changed the punctuation

You can enjoy a life free offromresponsibilities and obligations

go out with friends or any other hobby.

...or engage in any hobby of your choice.

What is more, children are innocent andpure human beings.

well... "pure human beings" sounds a bit odd... it really does not convey a message. This is my suggestion;
What is more? Childhood is innocent and free from many adult frictions and worries.
jenniferxx 3 / 9  
Feb 15, 2013   #4
To sum up, childhood is the best time in a person's life. As a child you can enjoy life without responsabilities and worries and you can face different situations with love and patience without grudge.

[i]To sum up,to most of the people, childhood is the best part of life. As a child you can enjoy life without assuming responsibilities and worries. Also, you can see any situations with pure vision and tolerant heart without hatred and blaming others. [i]


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