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"I went through my childhood with more sad memories than happy ones. I sometimes
wish that I could feel the other way around. Unfortunately, the dramatic and sad experiences stand out more in my memory bank. Among my childhood memories
I remember the experience of my father helping me on my math problems
when I was nine years old the most. That experience has e
ffected my relationship with my parents negatively and taught
me to be a better parent.
When I was nine years old, I had trouble in math. I could not do multi-digit division; thus, my math performance in school suffered. My mother made me kneel for about fifteen minutes then spanked me afterward if I got an average grade or below in school. She could not help me because she had no education. To overcome the math difficulties
, I asked my father for help one night. The experience that I went through while getting help from him was the worst
one in my childhood.
My father and I spent three
hours together that night (Remove comma) and that was the longest three hours I had ever experienced
in life. He helped me by having me doing many multi-digit division problems and if I made any mistake he would whip the back of my hands with a wooden ruler. I,
got countless numbers
especially at the beginning because I did not
know how to solve them. I can still recall his out control temperament. He yelled at me and told me how stupid I was continuously. I remember crying nonstop and begging him to stop hitting me. At the end of that three hours I was no longer having any more math problem or any other problems. (The fluidity of these two paragraphs is such that they should be connected.)
After that night, I always made sure that my parents would never know any of my problems. I stopped asking my parents for help. That experience has e
ffected the way I feel about my parents. I was not close
to my parents before (Remove comma)
and that experience deteriorated our relationship further. That experience also e
ffects the way I raise my children today. I learn to be more tolerable and helpful to children, and not to repeat the same nightmare that I went through with my father. So, were your experiences and your relationship with your parents (such as it is/was) a positive influence on you? You could expound a little here.)
In summary, the three hours that I spent with my father while he was helping me with my math problems is my most memorable childhood experience. It has a negative effect on my relationship with my parents, yet it has a positive effect on the way I raise my family today; I learn to be a better parent out of that experience."
Nice work. Again, nice flow, a few mechanical errors, but nothing major. Good organization, good content. I am sorry that this has happened to you, but it sounds like you came out of it a stronger, more capable person. Congratulations.