It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own point.
Every individual has a special ability. Though, it does not mean that he/she can not learn other skills. In schools, children are oriented towards fields that they are more skillful at. However, some students may be pushed towards fields that they are not qualified enough at, but forcibly by their families. Although the latter group could succeed in those careers, but the first group will be more prosperous.
It is popularly claimed that, every person is made for a specific job. Furthermore, children find themselves more capable in the field that they are more interested in. In particular, we all have heard at least one famous music by Beethoven. Although he was deaf, but he was a genius musician who had an extraordinary ability in playing piano and writing piano sheet musics. Therefore, every person should discover his talent at the first place so that she can utilize her full ability ( or one hundred percent ability) in her life.
People also argue that individuals are multi-talented. Therefore, they can strengthen their skills by practicing and focusing on it. For instance, every person can become a sport person by rehearsing a lot. Though, those who are genius in a specific sport field can be a better professional sport person by taking a shorter period of rehearsing.
Overall, it is a fact that children can achieve every career that they have intended to start. However, there are some careers that children are capable to accomplish perfectly. In either condition, they should be taught fundamental rules and knowledges. Nonetheless, in my opinion, being talented in a field that you attend, the efficiency in response to a certain amount of effort will be higher and also you would become more expert than others
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ThoughHowever , it does not mean that he/she can not learn other skills.
In schools, children are oriented towards fields that they are more skillful at. However, some students may be pushed towards fields that they are not qualified enough at, but forcibly by their families.
... well, this slightly deviate from your topic. Your topic is more general and it speaks of which talent, born or acquired, is more important for professions such as music or sports. I think you need to maintain your writing to address this. Always keep a proper alignment with your prompt!
It is popularly claimed that, every person is made for a specific job.
....no need of a comma after "that"
Furthermore, children find themselves more capable in the fields that they are more interested in.
In particular, we all have heard at least one famous music by Beethoven. Although he was deaf, but he was a genius musician who had an extraordinary ability in playing piano and writing piano sheet musics
.... Well , Beethoven's case is your example and therefore you need to give more prominence for that;
Beethoven, the most renowned musician was born deaf, but his extraordinary talent for music made him world famous.I think your essay is too short. You should give more details, examples, rather than just use reasoning to argue your idea. I'm not saying reasoning is bad,but sometimes concrete evidence is more convincing.
