The debate surrouding the topic of origin of character in each individuals
... I feel you should present this in a more interesting and simpler tone;
Some people argue that the personality of an individual is more influenced by his or her born characteristics. However the others believe it is the experience which is more instrumental in shaping one's personality.some senses of a person
... I feel "senses" is an inappropriate usage here....It should be "characteristics"
To begin with, it can not be denied that some senses of a person are built up and existed since he was born.
First, it is undeniable that a person is born with certain personality traits.Due to the researchs for years, scientists and astrologers have provided a demonstration of the influence of genes and horoscopes on the characters of people, which distinguish them from the others.
... In my opinion, I feel you should treat scientists and astrologers separately since they are two different disciplines.
BasingBased on the particular genealogy
... it should be "based on"