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Some Causes of Stress -- work, family, finance.


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Mar 30, 2009, 02:38pm   #
In our modern technological century, stress become a popular situation to all of us. There are many reasons for this. First, the most common reason is the pressure of work. when working people have to face up to much pressure such as : too little time for too much work, too much more difficult tasks given. This makes us stressed easily. Second, depression is allso a remarkable reason. loosing a person or a pet who you love leading your disappointments and sadness. althouigh children always a source of stress for parents, when the child dies, the stress is overwhelming. Finally, another reason of no less importance is finance. Some people try to earn more money, have a big house or car, overwhelmed by their demands. Some other people stressed by a loss of income or mounting credit card debt. Overall, gaining knowlodge of the leading causes of stress is essential. Use that knowldege to keep a heathy life.

Mar 30, 2009, 03:43pm   #
What was the prompt for this one -- it seems like an odd topic for an admissions essay. Also, what sort of word count are you looking at? Beyond that, I'd say you should try to say something a bit more thoughtful about the topic. Yes, all the things you list are causes of stress, but can you come up with something specific about modern society that would make it more stressful than, say, that of 200 years ago?
In our modern, technological century, stress becomes a common experience for all of us. There are many reasons. for this. First, the most common reason is the pressure of work. when working people have to face up to much pressure -- such as : too little time for too much work, too many difficult tasks given, and so forth. This makes us stressed easily. Second, depression is also a remarkable reason. Losing a person or a pet who you love leads to disappointments and sadness. Although children are always a source of stress for parents, when the child dies, the stress is overwhelming. Finally, another reason of no less importance is finance. Some people try to earn more money, have a big house or car, overwhelmed by their demands. Some other people stressed by a loss of income or mounting credit card debt. Overall, gaining knowledge of the leading causes of stress is essential. Use that knowledge to keep a healthy life.

You are doing great! I think you should use a spell checker in your word processing prgm. Also, make sure you capitalize the first words in sentences.



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