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What are the causes and solutions of Anti-social actions?


megiacodon 5 / 15  
Feb 23, 2011   #1
Some people claims that an individual person behaves in an anti-social way because society in general is to blame. What are the causes and solutions of these anti-social actions and who is responsible for this?

In some aspects, modern society has distorted some moral as well as human value, border between right and wrong has never been so vague before. Anti-social actions issue reminds me of a principle of the Buddha: " Human's nature is good". I strongly believe that almost all anti-social actions have legitimate reasons and people do those are victims of serial complicated and harsh circumstances that they have subjected to suffer and it is a long process that good-natured human turns into criminals.

God is unfair in someways. From the moment we were born, luck has not smiled with all of us, at all time, and that's the way we call it destiny. Children are brought up under various conditions and people live in very different environment as well. Modern society contains many problems. To live, people have to compete harshly and suffer from stressful life. There are tough times when someone has to face unemployment, divorce, when effort brings nothing,... Experiencing continual bad lucks, it is normal for some people to have negative attitude towards life and society on the whole. Their protests are not irrational according to psychology.
tonia 2 / 4  
Feb 24, 2011   #2
Your reason about why it is society that is to blame when an individual person behaves in an anti-social way is sound and thoughtful, and there is no apparent grammar errors, but you don't give your reason about what are the solutions and who is responsible for this.

As for me, I believe everyone should realize that although we can not change our family background, in other words, the start of our life, we still have opportunity to change the destiny of us. It is said the meaning of life does not depend on in what position we are when we reach the end of life, but the distance between the start and the end of our life. Therefore, we don't need to complain everyday about why God is so unfair, just try to make a change. Admittedly, in a way, circumstances are to blame, but as to who is mainly responsible for the behavior of anti-society, I think it is the individual.

The solutions of anti-social actions are so complex. Merely focus on individual is of little use, but should resort to the government. Sometimes the government should both take the humanistic strategies and compulsory measures.
OP megiacodon 5 / 15  
Feb 24, 2011   #3
Hi Tonia
Thanks for your comment.
Frankly, I haven't finished my essay yet, I found it difficult to continue. Some topics are extremely hard because it requires life experience.
Your comment suggests me good idea. Thanks for that!
silentwf 2 / 4  
Feb 24, 2011   #4
Hi
I agree with tonia, you don't state reasons or support it with examples or reasoning.
The two paragraphs you have written are well suited for an introduction, but I don't think it should stand alone as it is now.

I strongly believe that almost all anti-social actions have legitimate reasons and people do those are victims of serial complicated and harsh circumstances that they have subjected to suffer and it is a long process that good-natured human turns into criminals.

Maybe it's just me, but I think this sentence is a little bit too long. Try rewording it perhaps?

From the moment we were born, luck has not smiled with all of us, at all time, and that's the way we call it destiny.

Something about this sentence is awkward.

Keep up the good work, it's a great start. It just needs a body and a conclusion and you will have a good and powerful essay.
OP megiacodon 5 / 15  
Feb 24, 2011   #5
Thanks for your comment, silentwf.
I really need to edit my unfinished essay. What a pity that this page has not the edit button.
Should I continue right on the reply section?^^
OP megiacodon 5 / 15  
Feb 24, 2011   #6
Ok, here I continue my work.

Frankly, we could blame this situation for no one. It is undeniable that life is tough and surroundings affects our thinking as well as our deed profoundly, we- homo sapiens, must learn how to live better. Changing background is not at hand, but changing attitude and actions is the matter that everyone can self-determine. Everyone should be mainly responsible for his actions. As long as stopping complaining difficulties, people can have more energy to struggle and enjoy life with the optimistic view. This also affects positively on others's attitude, so anti-social behaviors are less likely to occur.

Resolving this problem is complicated and time-consuming, it requires the cooperation of the whole society and government must play the crucial, active role. Ensuring social justice is vital. Government should focus on helping rather than trying to find ways to punish.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 2, 2011   #7
I haven't finished my essay yet, I found it difficult to continue.

Well, I think you are doing well!

I strongly believe that almost all anti-social actions have legitimate reasons causes and people committing those actions are victims of serial complicated and harsh circumstances to which they have been subjected, and it is a long process that turns good-natured humans into criminals.---I made many changes here. It is a hard sentence to write! The way you think is complex, but the sentences should be simple.

God is unfair in some w ays. ----Very good job, starting the paragraph with a sentence like this... a sentence that catches the attention.

Experiencing continual unlucky events, it is normal for ...

If you have trouble continuing, just sit down and enjoy a great article about this topic. Find a fascinating article. When you finish, you can write a bit about the author's main idea and how it relates to this.

Articles are wood, and the essay is the fire.
OP megiacodon 5 / 15  
Mar 3, 2011   #8
Thanks for your great comment, EF_Kevin! I'm always confused with social topics like this, I should read more and simplify my thoughts.


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