Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 5


what cause some students to cheat in their exams


bsm25 3 / 5  
Jun 16, 2012   #1
Nowadays, the problem of cheating in exam, or academic dishonesty as some colleges and high schools refer to it, is not a new problem in Vietnam and the other countries. While the demand for educated labour is getting higher and higher, there are fewer workers who can meet these needs. This problem may origin from the students' ability to cheat during exams. A question was asked: What cause some students to cheat on exams? In my opinion, there are three main reasons for cheating.

First of all, the main reason which leads students to cheat on the tests is that they want to have good grades. Most of students are under pressure from their family, their friends and their teachers... They are afraid that, if they gets bad marks, their parents will complain them, their friends will look down on and laugh at them. They imagine a dark future, with no good jobs, no good life. On the other hand, if they see their classmates get high mark, they want that fame, too. So they cheat as well as they hope. As the result/ therefore these pressures unintentionally make students value their good marks much more than their own knowledge

Having no ability for doing the exams is the second reason that cause some students cheating. From one side, students don't have their own self-confidences, some cannot do the exams because they are too difficult for them, and some students believe that they are not smart enough to pass the exams. Instead of studying hard, paying attention to classes, reviewing lessons, and doing exercises, they try to cheat in exams. On the other side, many students don't have enough time for reviewing, perhaps they get ill, they must take care of their grandparents and several different reasons. That can be sympathize, but I think that students should dispose their time in a rational way.

The final reason why some students cheat on their exam is because they get lack of self-respect. Students with high self-respect will never cheat. They feel really embarrassed by cheating. Instead of this, they try to review the lessons as best as thay can. So they get high grades thanks to their own knowledge. In contrast, students with low self-respect don't feel ashamed of cheating on the tests. To get good marks, they cheat as much as they possible. They do not feel anything wrong, and only think about the result that they can get if the teacher find out his cheating.

In conclusion, there are many reasons for students to cheat. Being under pressure for eloquent scores, having no ability for doing exams and the lack of self-respect are the contributing factors to cheating in exams. In the future, I hope the awareness of students about no cheating during the test will be raised, thanks to this, our society which is based on workers, who are educated and having their own knowledge would develop fully.

Please correct and give me your comments about the content, vocabulary, grammmar, organization and mechanics of this essay. Any suggestions will be also appreciated. Thanks for your concern!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 16, 2012   #2
Nowadays, the problem of cheating in exams , or academic dishonesty as some colleges and high schools refer to it, is not a new problemvery common in Vietnam and the other countries. --------------------- Nowadays makes new problem sounds redundant

While the demand for educated labour is getting higher and higher, there are fewer workers who can meet these needs. This problem may origin from the students' ability to cheat during exams.

While the demand for educated labour is getting higher and higheron the increase , there are only fewer workers who can meet these needsthe required level of literacy . This problem may be originating from the students' ability to cheatingat theduring exams

This problem may origin from the students' ability to cheat during exams.

I think you better present this idea differently. It's a strong point and looks like it's not given it's due recognition :) ;
Cheating at the exams may be one of the root causes for this issue that enables students to possess credentials that they actually have not earned on merit.
basketball 7 / 35  
Jun 18, 2012   #3
Hi Thu,
There are a lot of grammar mistakes as people have already pointed out. On the other hand, I think you can do some revision on the content and organization as well too.

On the other side, many students don't (do not) have enough time for reviewing, perhaps they get ill, they must take care of their grandparents and several different reasons. That can be sympathize, but I think that students should dispose their time in a rational way.

First, this is unecessary, I don't think you should mention it but focus on your previous point.
Your first reason is that "they want to have (get) good grades". However, from what you write, I have the impression that it is because the pressure from their parents, future as well as the competition from their peers rather than they WANT it. Consider revise the topic sentence in this case.

If you still consider your second and third ideas, you will need to do a lot of revision. I don't think the integration of these paragraph are very well and makes much sense. Instead, I would suggest you split the ideas in the first paragraph to talk one paragraph about peers competition and one paragraph about parents, future's pressures. Then add one other ideas like they don't believe it is a wrong thing to do.

Good luck,
OP bsm25 3 / 5  
Jun 18, 2012   #4
thank you all for helping me to correct mistake. I'm Vietnamese. Currently, I'm trying to learn Ielts. And my skill of writing English is the worst. Hope you care my post :)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 18, 2012   #5
Hi Thu,

Don't think you write so bad... for most of us, English is not our first language and therefore we need to keep improving our English writing skills. If you have that attitude it is easy for you to learn English faster. Pay attention to grammar mostly, and of course to your essay structure. I remember EF Kevin's useful advice. He asks those who struggle with grammar to write the correct sentence ten times. It helps you remember the correct form. I too recommend his advice to you.

Having no ability for doing the exams is the second reason that cause some students cheating.

------- inability is the word that means having no ability

The second reason for cheating is the student's inability to face the exam.--------- Try to express your ideas in short sentences, preferably in active voice. That helps you avoid mistakes and present your idea more directly and clearly.

From one side, students don't have their own self-confidences, some cannot do the exams because they are too difficult for them, and some students believe that they are not smart enough to pass the exams.

From one side - I'm not in favor of this phrase ... it does not sound proper... Instead I suggest - on one hand / One reason is that My suggestion

On one hand the students don't have self confidence---------- note ; self confidence and not self confidences'

I don't say your English writing is very good, but it is not very bad either.... You show lots of potential for improvement... So try hard and you'll be there :)


Home / Writing Feedback / what cause some students to cheat in their exams
Writing
Editing Help?
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳