I'm totally impressed by your vast fund of vocabulary. Here are just my humble suggestions:
On the long run, the taxes we pay are feeding these lackadaisical convicts more than the benefits we accumulate for what we pay.
=> In the long run
In addition, rehabilitation centers are even more crowded which can be detrimental to the health of other prisoners.
=> I suppose you should add a comma before "which" . Anyway, it seems to be a typo :)
Aside from that, we are serving meals and comfort all throughout their years of repentance.
=> ...we are serving meals and giving comfort all ...
I'm not certainly sure whether you should lard your IELTS writing with so many complicated words or not. However, it appears that all of them seem to be straight to the point then I guesss it's alright :)
Really looking forward to your next post!