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( IELTS essay) Brain drain: wealthy nations should compensate poor countries?


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More and more professionals are moving from developing countries to rich countries to fill the vacancies of specialist. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are cheating poor countries. Others feel that it is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you think rich countries should compensate poor countries for the people they encourage to come?

Brain drain refers to the movement of highly skilled or qualified manpower from one nation to other, probably from poor to rich nation through immigration. This exodus of people in search of greener pastures has been a phenomenon since time immemorial. Though these rich countries are stealing skilled professionals from poor countries, I do not fell it should be compensated by developed nations.

To begin with, in poor countries, many of the highly skilled professionals are continuing unemployed or underemployed. Some people argue that the developed countries are getting skilled and qualified professionals without making any investment for their education or training. It is true that, professionals from poor countries must save their own countries as they their native societies spend resources for educating and training them. Besides, these people need the expert service for the progress of their economy and people. The other side of the coin is that, individual have the right to decide where to live and work. Apparently, the developed countries find themselves without enough workers to feed their development, try to attract skilled labors by giving higher salaries and other facilities.

Nevertheless, poor nations asking compensations from rich countries for the skilled workforce is irrational. The foreign exchange by these people contributes a lot to support the economic progress of their mother country. After acquiring advanced skills and qualifications from other nation, some people returns home. There are others who, invest a portion of their income in their own countries. Moreover, lots of people help their relatives back home in meeting their livelihood. All these measures boost the living status of native people. Thus, these people return their gratitude for spending the resources for their education and training. Allowing emigration can prevent social unrest due to unemployment.

In summary, it is a natural process, that skilled professionals are leaving their poor countries for rich nations to get the job of their choice. It should not be taken an issue between governments. In this process, developed nations have no obligation to pay poor nations for their professionals.

overall good essay. keep it up.

comma should not come after who in the folllowing sentence
There are others who, invest a portion of their income in their own countries.

correct line as follows
There are others who invest a portion of their income in their own countries.



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Devaraj
Jan 9, 2013, 02:03pm   #
And here is my essay :)
Today, qualified people have inclination for moving from poor to rich countries in order to gain places to work in some areas. Many people claim that it is a natural trend, while others find it hard to accept this fact and argue rich countries are stealing from them. From my perspective, I mostly agree with the first thesis.
As far as I am concerned, workers choose to move to others countries because in there, they offer them a heap of amazing things, which help them a lots in their careers as well as their lives. For instance, rich countries give them chances to get the high wages or go abroad to learn some knowledge and proficiencies. Secondly, they may win promotions or even get extra pays if they work hard, which are not happen frequently in poor countries. Also, in developed countries, they have hundreds of good services supported free by governments to make lives better.
On the other hand, some people are not welcome in their hometowns. In fact, they abilities are not noticed or recognized. It leads to uncomfortable feelings of being useless and unsatisfied, which well-educated people often have. Result is that most of them might weigh up to find other places to work and few others stand still to prove their efficiencies. To support this matter, I will take my brother as an example. My poor brother got the MBA with the excellent grades and also had very good experiences, though he did not receive what he supposed to have. Because the leaders were scared that my brother could be their boss one day and of course, there are no bribes left for them. So he has come to Singapore to get a job. And look what he gets, 3000$ per month, which is consider extremely high in Vietnam and also in Singapore.
It is also worth noting that moving or not is an internal decision; nobody can force them to leave. Apparently, giving out a choice depends on many aspects and people have the right to take their own paths in order get the best things. So we can put blames on rich countries for pulling people to work for them.
Hai salmav..

Thanks for correction..
It is not allowed to post an essay in others thread as a norm from the forum. I have no problem atall for posting it here. for your betterment i told. If you post it as your thread more people will comment on it...):
I am using mobile for comments. Its difficult for me to read your essay in small screen too..so be careful..whoever commenting my essay i used to give that back. Mostly sharp comments...):
So you are welcome ...and be careful..
Tessy.
Jan 9, 2013, 10:32pm   #
Thanks for reminding me of that. I just want have feedback in the same topic of yours, instead of posting new one. I am really sorry :'(.
But I cant delete it now :((
Jan 9, 2013, 11:52pm   #
Do you think it is more logical in the following way ?

To begin with, though some people argue that the developed countries are getting skilled and qualified professionals without making any investment for their education or training. And it is true that, professionals from poor countries must save their own countries as they their native societies spend resources for educating and training them. However, in poor countries, many of the highly skilled professionals are continuing unemployed or underemployed, which leads to impossibility for them to give back to the countey. Besides, these people need the expert service for the progress of their economy and people. The other side of the coin is that, individual have the right to decide where to live and work. Apparently, the developed countries find themselves without enough workers to feed their development, try to attract skilled labors by giving higher salaries and other facilities.
hai Han...

I am really sorry to say that i am not able to comment about any large para which is posted in the comment area..(:

Really sorry to remind you that i am using mobile for commenting essays..it is very hard to read the small sentances in the small screen as i am not habitual in it especially large paras...
Whoever commenting my essays i am giving the same back, but some times though harsh comments...sorry........ if anybody hurt...(:
My aim is to see improvement..
You can post the full essay in the forum..
All the best..
Tessy



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