thinhtvdhtmMore and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is a part of the natural movement of workers around the world.
What are your views?
Do u think rich countries should pay poor countries for this movement.
Solutions to discourage this movement?
Recently, there has been a trend that people who are qualified moving from poor nations to rich nations
for more opportunities to develop and have a better life. Some people think that by this way
, rich countries are robbing poor countries of essential manpower
like doctors, scientists and so on. Personally, I entirely disagree with this point of view.
To begin with, I believe that this movement is a natural phenomenon. People always desire to have more chance to develop themselves as well as acquire a better life. Therfore, that qualified people moving to rich countries to have opportunities developing in their fields that they cannot do in poor countries is easy to understand. In addition, in developed countries, advancement in technology and good working environment can create better condition for them.
For example, an information technology engineer cannot develop himself
and create more technological products in poor countries due to lack of technology development. If he still works in poor country, he will have no chance to develop his ideas as well as use his talent. In contrast, when he moves into developed countries, he has more chance to apply their knowledge into practice as well as gain a much better life.Rich countries also
have many benefits from this movement. Therefore, those countries should compensate to poor countries where qualified people are trained and educated. Poor countries often have to spend lots of money on educating and training those people, while they cannot receive any benefits from those people. (Structure of this sentence is too complex. You use too many "they", "them". This repetition makes your paragraph hard to follow and boring. You should be more flexible)
To discourage this movement, it will be more successful when there is co-operation between rich and poor countries. Poor countries should create a good working condition for their essential personnel as well as benefit for them such as large salaries, position in society and other benefits. In addition, developed countries should invest more money in poor countries; instead of moving to rich countries, they can work in their own countries with good working environment as that in rich countries.
In a word, this movement seems to be natural. If this phenomenon continues, the gap between rich and poor nations will be wider than now. Discouraging this movement is a good way for poor countries to reduce gap.Hi thinhtvdhtm,
I dont know whether or not IELTS grade your ideas when you take writing test. Because when I read your passages, I cannot understand much your points of view, and even the topic.
When I check your essay (although juz with my modest knowledge) I just focus on your grammar, stucture, spelling and some collocation, but your ideas I ignore. However, that is my opinion, maybe there are some problems here with your coherence or clearance.