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It is better to use money for improving our planet than space exploration


mrsoup90 1 / 1  
Apr 29, 2014   #1
please help me to correct my essay... thank everybody very much

With all troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things?

Nowadays, The world is facing with a great deal of trouble which are devastating Earth's climate and human's society. While people are spending a huge money on space adventure. Personally, I disagree that it is complete waste of money paying for space exploration because everything has two sides. However, a deeper look into the features convince me that people should use money to solve the world's problems rather than outer space discovery.

People have been paying billions of dollar to find out the life on other planets where are billions year of light far from our global. Nevertheless, they neglect the truth that hundred speices of plant and animal are disappearing on the Earth every day. Is finding the life or even trace of life really meaningful whereas we have been losing millions of beautiful race per year? Why don't we invest money to save what we have got instead of finding indefinite things on outer space?

Another angle to discuss could be found in the fact that the globe climate is quickly changing and extremely effect on Earth's life. Globe warming, climate change, sea level rise are transforming creatures' inhabitance which is pushing thousand species into the risk of being extinction. At the same way, people are losing our inhabitation, our planet gradually where we absolutely capable to improve it better. Is it really conducive to find a replace planet?, and we do that for what? to begin a new civilization, to protect human race or to demolish as we did on the Earth?

It is certain that people can weigh up which side of the topic they should support. However, the above mentioned discussions are convincing enough to lead me to the conclusion that it is better to use money for improving our planet than space exploration.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 29, 2014   #2
With all troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things?

Is this your prompt or a part of your essay? I guess it is the prompt, am I right?

Nowadays,.

.... Again, I guess this is your intro. If so, I suggest you to follow dumi's approach for the intro;
OP mrsoup90 1 / 1  
May 2, 2014   #3
With all troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is complete waste. The money could be better spent on other things?
this is the topic question,,, thanks for your help.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
May 9, 2014   #4
Another angle to discuss could be found in the fact that the globe climate is quickly changing and extremely effect on Earth's life.

There is lots of redundancy in the first part of this sentence. Keep your writing more clear and straight;
Further, the global climatic conditions keep changing and affect the survival of the earth seriously.

Globe warming, climate change, sea level rise are transforming creatures' inhabitance which is pushing thousand species into the risk of being extinction.

Present your ideas more clearly. Do not unnecessarily lengthen your sentences.
Follow the approaches above and re do this essay and post it here for our feedbacks :)


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