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"It is better to be safe than sorry" - TOEFL ibt


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May 20, 2011, 04:29am   #1
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to be safe than sorry
Use reasons and examples to support your responses.

In our life, safety and danger are two factors of human life. Sometimes safety brings more assurance but not all danger is simply danger, taking a risk means taking a chance. What is the better: safety or risk?

People in favor of security think nothing can be got unless there is an assurance. We should respect our life and risk may bring an end without anything. For instance, when driving on a big crowded street, people always say: it is better to be safe than sorry because a moment of carelessness will result in a loss of life.

On the other hand, risk is considered to be dangerous, but it is also a chance for anyone who would like to make a change of their own life. People think they can not stand living a tedious life with no harm done. For example, a student would like to get admitted to MIT. Although his scores are not too high, at average, he had better apply for it because the more you know how to take risk, the more you can get.

In conclusion, I think safety and risk should be coexistent and should not be separated as I would like to have a risky life as well as a secure one. If we know to to balance them, we can not only get success, but also we can enhance the preciousness of life.

Hi Hieu,

Your essay is not cohesive.There are grammatical misatakes.
You can share your experiences in life while using examples.
Keep on writing.Don't try to translate what you think in your own language.
Try thinking in English each sentence and write it down.
Hope my suggestions are helpful to improve your English.

Thanks and Regards,Vinu.
May 20, 2011, 11:58am   #3
Your essay is pretty short on the balance of an independent Toefl essay. Each of your body paragraph should consist of at least 5 setence.
You should provide more specific examples to expand your writing. For example, the second paragraph only has 2 sentences which is too short. You can give an example of your own life, and that is ok.

This sentence:"Sometimes safety brings more assurance but not all danger is simply danger, taking a risk means taking a chance." has some problems with syntax. The clause "taking a risk means taking a chance" must be seperated with either a semi colon or with a comma plus the word "and". You can also make up a sentence with that.
Here is an example of "redundancy." Google that word if you don't know it. :-)
In our life, safety and danger are two factors of human life.---This is redundant because you express that it is "in life" 2 times. It is better to express it only 1 time.
In our life, s Safety and danger are two factors of human life.

And in this second sentence I'll add some words to make it clearer:
Sometimes safety brings more assurance but not all danger is simply danger. Taking a risk is sometimes necessary in order to have a chance to discover something new.

I like this ending!---> If we know to to balance them, we can not only get success, but also we can enhance the preciousness of life.
Very good...



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