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Having a trip with a tour leader definitely helps the one to enjoy his trip in the best way


entezarifateme 1 / -  
Feb 10, 2014   #1
Travelling is one of the most memorable events. That is why the one should enjoy it. From my vantage point travelling in a group with a tour leader is the best approach of travelling for he knows plenty of interesting places in addition he has a schedule the vocation.

The first aspect to point out is that a tour leader is someone who knows many touristic places as a result during a vocation the one always could visit lots of amazing places. Not only the tour leader has been to those places, but also he knows how to get there for this reason the one's time will not be wasted searching for the monuments. Apart from the points made above, one can not oversees the fact that the tour leader knows the one's interest to illustrate he knows whether the one prefers to visit a monument, a museum or a landscape. In short the tour leader will help one to enjoy his trip the way he likes.

Furthermore, the tour leader has got an agenda for the vocation. In addition he has planned for the tour from days or weeks before the trip and he exactly knows where he is taking the one. for this purpose the one could be certain about the efficiency of his trip. Not only the one could see the schedule of the vocation, but also if the one did not liked some of the destinations he could ask for other destinations. Indeed the tour leader can schedule the trip the way all the travellers enjoy that.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that having a trip with a tour leader definitely helps the one to enjoy his trip in the best way. In the following years there will be much more tours led by tour leaders.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Feb 10, 2014   #2
You need to improve your introduction structure in order to get a good score for this task.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Feb 12, 2014   #3
vocation

vacation

if the one did not liked some of the destinations

did not like/ not liked
I feel you have some understanding about the overall essay structure for this task. However, you need to fine tune it a little more. Pay attention to what dumi suggested above for your intro. Also this is the structure she suggests for the overall essay and I feel it's worth following. Read the sample essays to get an idea of it!
aldebaran 8 / 17 2  
Feb 15, 2014   #4
Hi,
Travelling is one of the most memorable events. That is why the one everyone should enjoy it. From my vantage point travelling in a group with a tour leader is the best approach of travelling forbecause he knows plenty of interesting places in addition he has a schedule the vocation.

Not only the tour leader has been to those places (you mean the leader must be a local person, right?)

Cheers,
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Feb 15, 2014   #5
Not only the tour leader has been to those places,

If you use paired conjunctions, like not only but also in the first of the sentence, generally the inverted sentence is used to stress the unique point of an event. For example, Not only has the tour leader been to those places...

if the one did not liked some of the destinations (a comma) he could ask for other destinations


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