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Best way to solve growing traffic & pollution; 'consumption policy development'


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Feb 8, 2014, 01:45pm   #
As we are all aware reducing the amount of fuel consumption has turned into a controversial discussion for the past 2 decades. I personally am of the belief that increasing petrol cost is not the only solution to resolve the traffic issues and inevitably, governors should choose alternative parameters to decrease the potential causes of such difficulties.

Living in the 21st century has increased people`s tendency to use their private cars excessively in comparison to the past, chiefly because of the modern lifestyle that people have chosen for themselves. In addition, expensiver petrol price might be a constructive measure for the experts to control over consumerism culture among their citizens.

Despite all the efforts made by the authorities, many governments have failed to find an appropriate answer over this concern, irrespective of all the rules and regulations which have been designed to help them in more beneficial methods. Plus the fact that increasing fuel price may lead the society in a higher inflation as it plays an important part in every aspect of individual`s life. I believe that there are several constructive ways to tackle such problems. Firstly, well-equipped public transportation could play a key role to decline the traffics on roads. Secondly, the experts must undoubtedly, improve people`s awareness about the serious damages affecting their health as well as their environment. Eventually, children education and encouraging them to be more passionate about their environment could be two examples of the possible practical actions against the air pollution.

In conclusion, I must say that it is far more preferable to develop a consumption policy rather than rising prices which may have a reverse effect in the long run. I think that to solve traffic and pollution problems, several measures need to be sorted out, besides increasing the price of petrol.

Feb 8, 2014, 10:03pm   #
Hi..there
abnous81:
I personally am of the belief that increasing petrol cost is not the only solution
... Personally, I believe that
abnous81:
In addition, expensiver petrol price might be a constructive measure for the experts to control over consumerism culture among their citizens.
... increasing petrol price
Feb 9, 2014, 02:14am   #
Thanks in advance. well that`s the structure I normally use for my introduction. Any suggestion to make my introduction more appropriate with the context you have just given?
Feb 9, 2014, 03:10am   #
abnous81:
Thanks in advance. well that`s the structure I normally use for my introduction. Any suggestion to make my introduction more appropriate with the context you have just given?

Ok, let's see where you deviate from what we have proposed :)
abnous81:
As we are all aware reducing the amount of fuel consumption has turned into a controversial discussion for the past 2 decades. I personally am of the belief that increasing petrol cost is not the only solution to resolve the traffic issues and inevitably, governors should choose alternative parameters to decrease the potential causes of such difficulties.

You do not adequately attend to the background of the issue. (Here you don't have a hook too, but it is ok though your hook would help you impress your examiner about your writing skills). What you should in the background section is to paraphrase the prompt to introduce your issue and make him convinced that it is worth discussing.
Feb 10, 2014, 06:51am   #
abnous81:
Hi,
Thanks for the given instructions. Any suggestion that you would write for the introduction part?

Environmental pollution and growing traffic are two major issues of today's world. (hook) Some people hold the view that increasing the price of petrol is the best solution to arrest these issues because they believe that such action would discourage people to use their private vehicles. (background of the issue) However, I personally do not agree with this view and believe that there are more effective measures to address these issues.
Feb 11, 2014, 06:51am   #
Wow! that was awesome. I have my IELTS exam on this Saturday 15/Feb. I try to write more and get more feedback. Thanks a million
Feb 11, 2014, 08:23am   #
abnous81

this essay is too wordy. it has many not necessary word that does not support main idea; and choose exact word.

Living in the 21st century has increased people`s tendency to use their private cars excessively in comparison to the past, chiefly because of its comfort and privacy. the modern lifestyle[s] that people have chosen for themselves. [/s] In addition, expensiver petrol price increasing price of petrol might be a constructive measure for the experts to control over consumerism culture among their citizens.

Good luck



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